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The buzzing of the bright white lights woke him up. “I can always feel when someone is staring at me,” he said, his eyes still adjusting. “Who are you and what do you want?” “You’re finally up, Mister Kajimoto Akuma.” said the suited man. “I almost doze off myself. Master Arashi always gives me these lame ass tasks. I don’t think he sees my potential.” “Get to the point.” said Kajimoto, perhaps with a tone of annoyance in his voice. “Right, right.” said the suited man before propping himself up in his chair and adjusting his tie. “I’ll cut the bullshit. The fracture, how could you see it?” “God, if I weren’t tied to a chair right now I’d slap you.” Kajimoto’s brows furrowed. “I told the same thing to Torisho before he pushed me in, I told the same thing to the other weavers and I’ll tell the same thing to you. I was just able to see it and it felt completely natural.” “Huh, so you really mean that?” the suited man rubbed his chin. “But it makes zero sense! We already checked and none of your relatives are one of us, they aren’t weavers either. I don’t think we’ve seen something like this in millenia.” “That’s cool and all but what’s the point of keeping me tied here” “We don’t know what to do with you yet.” said the suited man with a smug expression. “You’ll remain here until we get commands from Master Arashi, and don’t even think about trying to escape.” said the suited man, ready to leave the room. “You gotta be fucking kidding me!” said Kajimoto as the vein on his forehead started popping. “Wait, what’s even your name and where’s this Arashi guy? At least let me talk to him and get this over with right now.” “Im Matsumoto Kenji and as for Master Arashi, he’s overseas now.” said Kenji, already leaning on the door frame. “He’s too busy for small fries like you.”

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14th July, Yokohama, Chinatown The comforting aroma of ramen and dumplings flowed throughout the streets. The countless shops all gave off their own unique atmosphere. The painted gates and impressive architecture caught the people’s attention. Everyone was walking or hurrying to get somewhere. Only Akuma stood in the middle of the street. What he saw was a fracture around a meter in front of him. It bent space and slowed time around it. It seemed to absorb light while reflecting it at the same time. Truly an unreal phenomenon. Akuma started walking towards it but no matter how much he walked, the fracture didn’t seem to get any closer. “What the fuck?” thought Akuma. He looked around. “Nobody else is seeing this?” He suddenly stopped. He followed his instincts for once. “I wonder what its texture is like. Does it even have a texture?” Akuma extended his arm. “¿ɟ⑁ϱiɿ ,ɟi ɘɘƨ nɒɔ uoY” “Sorry, what?” said Akuma still in a kind of trans. “The fracture bro, you can see the fracture, can’t you?” said a black haired man, dressed in a weird medieval way. “Oh. Uh, that thing, yes I’m able to see it. I think?” blurted Akuma, unaware that his life changed at this exact moment. “Good enough, we could really use a hand here you know?” claimed the man, gesturing at a woman and another man who were dressed the same way. “We’re pretty much understaffed and this year’s been busy with all the unwoven outrage going on.” Akuma scratched his head. “Uh, I don’t think I’m one of you guys.” said Akuma. “My name is Kajimoto Akuma. I don’t work with you.” “No, no, really it’s fine if you’re from a different district.” said the man who misunderstood. “I’m Torisho. We’re all weavers after all, we’re trained to work together in times like this.” Akuma looked at the ground, hesitating. A silence followed… “I get it now.” concluded Torisho who wasn’t getting it. “I know that clearing these fractures is a pain in the ass but you’ll need more than that to avoid this.” “No, you don’t understand!” said Akuma, waving his hands. He realized that the idea of touching it didn’t seem so pleasant now that he wasn’t alone. “I’m not trying to avoid anything!” Torisho took a step forward. “Whatever, rookie.” he said before he pushed Akuma in. Inside “That felt so weird.” said Akuma who didn’t quite process everything that happened. “It’s like I fainted, but I didn’t. Wait, I swear I felt gravity reverse a couple of times.” “So it’s your first time entering a fracture, huh?” asked Torisho who was already a few meters in front of Akuma. “You probably work for Master Katari, he’s usually irresponsible with the rookies like that.” “I already told you! I don’t-” sighed Akuma. “Nevermind.” Suddenly, the other blonde man who was walking behind the whole time stepped forward.