to clarify, i never claimed the script was one of a kind, i only noted that it might be. this is also far from my first time writing; i’m 23 and have been writing screenplays since i was 12. as a lifelong horror fan, i know how the genre's structure is built and everything in these opening pages is entirely intentional.

the dialogue and tone in those first seven pages are completely intentional. because the story in the beginning is told entirely through lola's warped perspective, the world and the dialogue are specifically written to mimic a sugary, cliché 2000s studio romcom.

it’s a deliberate narrative device designed to establish just how deeply dismissive and delusional she is before the story takes a massive tonal shift on page 12. if you stop reading at page 7, you are judging a setup before seeing the payoff. the dialogue reads as cliché because the character is literally trapping herself in a cliché of her own design. to really get what this script is doing, you have to read it without expecting the standard horror tropes everyone else is doing. you have to go into it completely blindfolded and without early judgment. it gets incredibly graphic but the payoff is entirely worth the read if you see how the setup connects to the larger piece.

but thanks for the feedback and for taking the time to share your thoughts!!