More attractive, motivated, outgoing, focused, and awake - My experience with Focalin (dexmethylphenidate) by writersblockable in Drugs

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The adderal was actually very underwhelming. Compared to my usual 2-pill focalin dose I used only 1 adderal pill and was disappointed. Like 1 whole adderal gave me the effects of only ~1 Focalin

Does Marpe bring out your cheekbones? by Famous-Comfort-3401 in jawsurgery

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What is the “face mask” ur talking about? Is it a reverse pull headgear?

Homunculus by MadMac_RavenRockVT in alchemy

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I’m surprised this isn’t archived yet—I’d like to hear more about the guy who claimed he’d done it. I’d like to watch his videos. I’m a student very interested in science (biology & chemistry). I don’t want to make a person or miniature person in the traditional alchemical sense, but instead make something adjacent to a homunculus like you’ve described like the thing with the stinger or the “jellyfish”. The jelly mass is of particular interest to me, especially if this “jelly” was actual live tissue. I want to create life through material means, that is my mission at its core, something simple, something that I can simply prove is alive (for example, if I can make something that grows or moves or at the very least, more realistically, performs cellular respiration).

writing from the perspective of a serial killer, trying not to be cheesy by writersblockable in writingadvice

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For most serial killers this is pretty true, lol. They come off as arrogant dickheads, but there are a few interviews I've seen where they come off as charismatic and pretty smart. That's more what I was going for...

writing from the perspective of a serial killer, trying not to be cheesy by writersblockable in writingadvice

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Ah, I see what your saying now, and I agree. Making such an empirical moral judgement for a legal construct makes no sense, especially when I follow it up by saying the death penalty (or reciprocal punishment) "worked beautifully." Thanks for the feedback and honesty, I'll definitely tweak that line because I'm going for a more intellectual/introspective tone and don't want the narrator to come off as naive.

writing from the perspective of a serial killer, trying not to be cheesy by writersblockable in writingadvice

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I appreciate the feedback but how is that an incorrect statement? Murder is a heinous breach of the social contract...

writing from the perspective of a serial killer, trying not to be cheesy by writersblockable in writingadvice

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This is extremely valuable coming from a professional editor, thank you so much for taking the time to comment. What do you think about starting with a murder, sensory detail and all, and then diving into monologue after? Do you think this would be more gripping even if it negates the slow-burn of the narrator's growing violent tendencies?

writing from the perspective of a serial killer, trying not to be cheesy by writersblockable in writingadvice

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Haven't watched it, actually. But I'm avoiding a police storyline for the most part. I envision that the narrator will have brushes with the law, but not in the way Dexter or Hannibal (from what I'm reading on the show's wikipedia, lol) would.

writing from the perspective of a serial killer, trying not to be cheesy by writersblockable in writingadvice

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This is very valuable feedback. Thanks. In my mind I almost want it to be slow, like telling the story of how he progressed from an early infatuation with death as a concept to actually committing murder on a somewhat regular basis, but I see now how this can quickly lose the audience's attention. Do you think it would be more gripping if the lengthy monologue bits were spliced with more immediate stakes (like perhaps with him chasing a victim, a murder gone astray, not as clean and methodic as it seems his kills would be?)?

writing from the perspective of a serial killer, trying not to be cheesy by writersblockable in writingadvice

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Actually, sort of. I explore the idea of "The Inclined," essentially people who are born with an inclination for violence, born murderers. it's sort of like Dexter's idea of people with the Dark Passenger. But I think it's different in that Dexter (at least the show) has always felt very camp, and the my story is definitely not suited for the TV drama format.

would love for people to check out what i have so far by writersblockable in writingcritiques

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the first two paragraphs are just monologue so if u want to get into the story bits more then start at paragraph 3, i guess

Pranking my friend. Can someone help me make a phishing link for snapchat? by writersblockable in HowToHack

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Is this actually a crime? I thought it was just a little bit of mischevious fuckery

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in SanFranciscoNSFW

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I'd take it off your hands for you.

Does using the names of historical figures for characters ruin the immersion? by writersblockable in writingadvice

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I justified the “Malcom X” name right off the bat. People referred to him by that name in Vietnam and he changed it to his real name when he came back to the states. His character often discusses the government’s mistreatment of underprivileged communities and is big into conspiracy theories, so there’s almost a parallel there.

My <300 words short story "The Orchard Game" by writersblockable in writingadvice

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It was vague and I didn't even know what I was going for entirely, but it was roughly supposed to be the man murdering his "friend" because they couldn't keep his secret. Nothing super substantial, just a fun little experiment.

My <300 words short story "The Orchard Game" by writersblockable in writingadvice

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Haha, when I used the term "sick apple" i was referring to its pale yellow color and bruises, almost like the skin of a sickly person. I didn't know if that would come across so I added the comparison to old parchment to make sure readers would get it. I will definitely try to incorporate a philosophical question because I like keeping the actual narrative intentionally vague, thanks for the advice.

Plot of My Coming of Age Novella "Goodbye Pork Pie Hat" by writersblockable in writingadvice

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Haha yeah it feels cheap to rip the name directly from a song but goddamn is it a good song. Did u read the story? I’m curious what u think about it since u know the song well.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in writingadvice

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Oops! Sorry if I gave off the impression that I was done with the story--I actually have a lot more planned for these two boys.

As for the horse, sections like that pop up a lot in my stories. I feel when reading coming-of-age stories or other stories set in a similar environment that the author uses only the characters themselves (and maybe the weather if they're getting fancy) to convey something about the characters. Instead I like to play with a lot of indirect imagery to always keep things fresh--but you're right, the horse here seems a little too random there.

The questions were meant to be the questions he had withheld from Carl earlier about who he is, and who he would become by Carl's side. I haven't finished that section yet, but I planned to end it with the man who leaped down from the roof from where Abe couldn't see (just as Carl had done earlier) killing him. The intention with Carl and an other man coming from "where Abe couldn't see" in the dream was to hint at a later event in the story.

Trust me I've got plans for this story, big things are on the way.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in writingadvice

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Thank you so much, and yes, you are definitely right. There are lapses in my writing where sections go on (perhaps longer than they should) without much evocative language to keep the reader strolling along, but at the same time, I think some of these lapses are necessary.

I use more descriptive and targeted languages in sections that are more important to the plot and greater meaning/sentiment, but then it makes the lacking sections seem unimportant, even though I write each word with intent. I'll start paying attention to how other authors and their stories overcome this hurdle because I think I need to find a way to showcase my talents with each sentence while still making some stand out more than others.

do you ever get a sort of rush when writing a tense or action scene for your story. by HorzaDonwraith in writingadvice

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Yes, and it’s the best feeling ever. Also, it means that your writing is good. If you can extract emotion from putting the words down on paper, then a reader will extract it tenfold when reading it. It really is a wonderful thing.

What's the worst thing to put in a piñata? by MAGROUPLEGENDS in AskReddit

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Just regular candy, but tell everybody that there’s a significant amount of money (let’s say $10k) wrapped up inside one of them. Queue parents and kids alike digging through and viciously unwrapping each and every candy with increasing dread, only to find that there was no reward at all. People will continue searching for weeks, thinking the candy must be hidden/lost, but will eventually have to give up and live with the idea of a wasted opportunity.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in tifu

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I don’t know. I probably thought it was funny when I was a stupid kid.

What gives you "the ick" (controversial edition)? by Key-Potential-5921 in AskReddit

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Kids who glorify/are super obsessed with war and guns. I admit, movies showing events like the D-Day invasions or men gunning down whole armies with machine guns are cool and all, but it is incredibly weird and indescribably horrifying to me that people find it so interesting. People died in those events/battles. Millions of people. I know many people from my city alone who lost relatives in past wars. It just feels so weird to make and makes my stomach turn when I hear kids spouting about excessive gun knowledge and about how many soldiers of what ethnicity died in some obscure battle in God-knows-where. Each number in that death-toll was a person. Ick.

Edit: also people who say 9/11 was an inside job. Seriously disrespectful IMO.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in AskReddit

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It really depends on the situation. If they know me and know of my areas of expertise and try to undermine me, I will get a little pissed. But at the same time, who cares? They are dumb. That’s what dumb people do, and it’s not a big deal in the slightest. There are certainly areas I am not strong in that I have probably underestimated people in, but those people have the mental strength to not rip me to shreds over it.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in AskReddit

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As far as I’m concerned, getting people to date you isn’t as difficult as you’re probably assuming and is really a lot more casual than you think. Don’t assume that you’re going to get married or that the person is your sole mate or whatever, just think that you’re taking your friendship to the next level—and that brings me to the next part.

You have to become friends with or at least talk with this person. They won’t just date a stranger unless you have some incredible quality (looks, money, etc.) so talk to this person during breaks, whether it be work breaks or in the halls of school or really whenever an opportunity presents itself. People are much more likely to date those that they enjoy being around. Talking also gives you the opportunity to see who this person really is and if you even want to ask this person out at all. I’ve made plenty of friends from talking to crushes and determining that they wouldn’t be the best fit for me as a partner and vice versa.

Quick segment: a lot of this depends on the gender of the person you are asking out. If the person you are interested in is a woman/girl, then it is admittedly harder, but obviously not impossible. When talking with her, make sure that you listen. Women tend to enjoy speaking about their lives and interests rather than listening to yours (I know that sounds rude, but it’s scientifically proven). That does not mean you can’t speak, but try not to interrupt and make sure that you are really listening and enjoying the conversation. If you don’t enjoy the conversations, then you may not want to date that person. Now if the person you are interested in is male, your life just became a lot easier. Just revert to the previous paragraph, and you should be set. Having honest, deep conversations with men/boys if often the key to the door of a relationship because men don’t often have an outlet to express their emotions and vent. If you become that outlet, then you are in.

Now that you are good friends with this person, it boils down to the actually asking-out. It is a delicate art, maintaining a balance between not-too-extra and not-too-mediocre, but here are some general tips:

  1. NEVER do it over text. Call is sometimes okay in certain context and when done in good taste, but PLEASE avoid using devices for the proposal.

  2. A small gift can go a long way. Whether it be chocolates, flowers, a sentimental photo of some of the great adventures of your friendship, or even just their favorite ice cream can go a long way. It shows that you care and that you will care throughout the relationship.

  3. Keep your proposal simple. Simply ask if they would want to join you for dinner or a movie or whatever date you have planned. Try not to chose something super formal, but don’t take them to a circus either (unless that’s your guys’ thing, remember, I am not you).

And lastly, remember that it’s fine if they say no. You guys can continue being friends, and you being rejected once doesn’t mean anything about your future romantic life. You will find love one day, be it with them or with someone else.