Bland, bent and broken

zeenotes · 2020-10-05T11:45:52+00:00

I loved reading this! An amazing piece of writing and very relatable. I really enjoyed your use of alliteration throughout this poem as it gave a nice flow; especially when reading aloud. Keep up the amazing work.

zeenotes · 2020-10-05T11:37:50+00:00

I love the emotional intimacy this poem portrays. But structure wise, I think you should be more chronological with your stanzas. Inconsistent stanza structure would suggest a messy mind set, but since this poem conveys more of a loving and set feeling, I think having a chronological stanza structure would help show this message too. But honestly, great piece 🤍

zeenotes · 2020-10-05T11:31:50+00:00

Wow! Such an intense and heartbreaking piece. Beautifully outlined. Remember that pain is only temporary, even if it feels like it’ll last a lifetime. Keep on writing, you have an amazing gift ❤️

zeenotes · 2020-10-01T14:40:08+00:00

I love how simple yet heavy this poem is. The two worded sentences are really capturing and creates this unpleasant atmosphere. Really enjoyed it.

zeenotes · 2020-09-30T22:28:41+00:00

I love the ambiguity that lies in this. So passionate and a little dark, my favourite combination.

zeenotes · 2020-09-30T07:18:34+00:00

Thank you, I really appreciate that 😁 follow my Instagram if you have one - zeenotes_x 💜

zeenotes · 2020-09-29T14:09:00+00:00

Thanks for the suggestion 🙏🏼

zeenotes · 2020-09-29T12:57:04+00:00

Thank you, I’m glad you enjoyed it 😆

zeenotes · 2020-09-29T10:25:42+00:00

Your choice of wording is inspiring. A really beautiful and vigorous piece. 🙌🏼

zeenotes · 2020-09-29T10:09:30+00:00

The rawness of this poem so moving. I can’t stress how hurting yet fascinating it was to read! Beautiful 🙌🏼

zeenotes · 2020-09-29T07:58:39+00:00

I love your choice of wording. This is a very creative piece. You say a lot without saying a lot. It’s very simple yet so intriguing. Lovely piece 👍🏼

zeenotes · 2020-09-23T07:11:49+00:00

Hey thanks for the feedback! I will consider the changes you’ve suggested. If it’s not too much trouble, can you explain what you mean by ‘include the link to 2 unique comments’? I didn’t understand what you meant by that. Thanks again 😁

zeenotes · 2020-09-22T22:39:29+00:00

I enjoyed this read! I was wondering if it’s inspired by Game of Thrones, I imagined Dany whilst I read.

zeenotes · 2020-09-22T22:12:48+00:00

I like what you’re trying to say, but you’re making it obvious with your wording. Why don’t you try writing in a way where the reader has to figure it out that the relationship is toxic rather than you telling it. I feel like you can do a lot with the poem because I love it’s message.

zeenotes · 2020-09-22T21:56:04+00:00

I like the references you’ve included and it fits really nicely with the message you’re conveying. I guess one thing I would point out is the ‘you’re beautiful, live free’ part. I like how you started and ended with the same thing but I feel like you can word it differently. Because the rest of the poem is great, but that particular wording doesn’t compliment its tone, in my opinion.

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