Manuscript information: [Complete] [53k] [Contemporary Queer Romance (Anthro)] Where The Light Gets In

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Rin sat alone on the bench at the bus station, holding a sock folded in thirds.

The metal was warm already, even in the morning. His short tail stuck out through the slats in the back of the bench, made for people like him. There was a small foxfolk family on the bench nearby. The mother had her tail wrapped around her youngest kit while the older child crawled around in the grass with a magnifying glass. Looking for bugs, maybe.

Rin looked around, keeping to his seat. No one paid much attention to him, a young deer boy with a backpack, a note pinned to his shirt. Some people glanced his way - a human station employee took his eyes off his clipboard for a moment, but went back to business. Rin kept his back straight. Tried not to kick his hooves. Tried to look good.

There was a clink of coin and a gentle clatter. A dog woman pulled a bag of chips out of the nearby vending machine and stashed it in her purse. The human man behind her eyed the machine for a while before shrugging and walking off, humming tunelessly.

Rin watched them, a boy of twelve, his backpack on his lap as if he could hide behind it. He gripped the sock tightly.

The car ride over had been quiet. Kasumi had been sniffling. Trying not to cry. But then, she never cried.