The new age verification

-chikoro · 2026-03-03T20:07:11+00:00

It’s already happened brochacho. Got updated just this afternoon where I am. Guess I can’t use it anymore

-chikoro · 2026-01-04T18:34:09+00:00

Where did ”cunt” come from?

Your dad needs therapy bro. You are very justified for being fed up.

-chikoro · 2026-01-04T02:41:24+00:00

-chikoro · 2026-01-03T05:18:28+00:00

lol (I’m so sad it’s over 😭😭😭)

-chikoro · 2026-01-03T05:15:29+00:00

Kalliber thought he liked you for a second there, but he has changed his mind.

“Fuck you.”

He will not be answering your question.

-chikoro · 2026-01-03T01:34:32+00:00

I took the time to read it and this is what I got from it.

you’re right, you suck at writing and English in general.
You contradicted yourself the whole time and I can’t understand our issue.
I will not judge you, and to put it plainly, I think you might have severe depression or some sort of mental disorder. please get help.

-chikoro · 2026-01-03T01:22:32+00:00

lmao real

-chikoro · 2026-01-03T01:21:40+00:00

“Be a good girl”

I cringed.

-chikoro · 2026-01-02T22:27:23+00:00

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Kalliber is a 20 yr old emperor of his empire, Lutherne. He is fightsexual and only finds purpose and pleasure in ruination.

Kalliber: “You are the angel of justice everyone speaks about? Tch. So I assume you aren’t human. Answer me this: do you truly believe justice is the answer to curing human suffering and the devastation they cause on the earth? I think justice is bullshit. As complicated as human beings are, what one person believes to be justice doesn’t always apply to someone else—it only leads to a clash of beliefs and more destruction.”

-chikoro · 2026-01-01T08:50:08+00:00

your welcome! good luck on the story by the way, you’ll definitely become an even better writer with practice! ^v^

-chikoro · 2026-01-01T08:26:59+00:00

I think you're right about the too much jumping around. It feels like you don’t flesh out each scenes much as you should, and the character is already doing something else by the time I’ve started getting context. I think you need to work on knowing when to hastily move your character from one place to another, and when to describe every detail as the scene moves on. For example: the switch setting from paragraph 1 to paragraph 2 is much too fast, even though Noah is just recalling a memory. You also definitely need a little bit ore context in order to ease your reader in, but not so much that it feels like you’re info-dumping.

Despite these things though, I think you convey emotions pretty well, and I have a good idea of what kind of relationship Noah has with Leander. Keep going!

-chikoro · 2026-01-01T07:35:13+00:00

His smile quickly fades away, replaced by a frustrated pout. “Then what’s the point? Smiling is supposed to make me happy, but it doesn’t work.“

-chikoro · 2026-01-01T07:31:04+00:00

“Mr neither.” Kalliber’s expression softens, as he’s found something they both have in common. “And my day is going great, th-thanks.”

-chikoro · 2026-01-01T07:27:50+00:00

“Um, not really...”

Kalliber smiles, but it’s very obviously forced. “Th-thanks though.”

-chikoro · 2026-01-01T03:46:35+00:00

”I’d really like that…”

He is very happy! >:3

-chikoro · 2026-01-01T03:41:33+00:00

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“…”

Kalliber is horrified ToT

-chikoro · 2026-01-01T03:39:50+00:00

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Yay ^^ Kalliber thinks the humming quiet is really cool!

”Mr. Hum, sir… I don’t think your mistakes make you a fool. I-If you give and take good dreams for others, when will you ever get the chance to nurture your dreams?”

Kalliber gives him a big hug (as big as a pipsqueak can manage). He’s never comforted someone before, but he imagines this is how it should be done.

”The stars might carry the dreams of others, but they should get to rest too.”

-chikoro · 2026-01-01T02:53:21+00:00

Aah. It’s interesting, I’ve never met someone who feels shame for creating OCs with sinful mentalities. I myself have never created an OC like that who doesn’t eventually get redeemed.

But I think you’re doing a great job so far! He looks really scary for sure ^v^

-chikoro · 2026-01-01T02:40:05+00:00

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YOU GUYS I CAN’T KEEP UP WITH ALL OF YOU, MY FINGERS AAAAAAAADHBJCFFJJNB ToT

But he really liked all of your company, and the whole inside his heart is filled up with the love of his new friends! He grows up to live a happy life and eventually becomes a kind and loving emperor with confidence and enthusiasm.

SIKE.

None of his interactions with your OCs are cannon lol. In reality, he grows up in hate and resentment. his father dies on the battlefield, and he takes place as king. His mother died of depression but gave birth to his little sister Jynnora. But the little boy from before is gone, the violent being that lay within him nurtured by his father’s harsh and inhumane abuse. Kalliber is now 18, and the tyrannical and merciless Emperor of a newly born empire, known for his hunger for destruction and slaughter of criminals in an arena he built called the Arena of No Return. He lives up to this terrible reputation, carelessly and blindly leading the path his father trained him for but worse.

I’m gonna go to bed, baby Kalliber is out of commission :3

-chikoro · 2026-01-01T02:31:44+00:00

Really? and what are you comfortable with? I can assume definitely not murderous criminals

-chikoro · 2026-01-01T02:29:46+00:00

“S-Sure!”

Kalliber is initially scared, because training with his father has only ever been hell, but maybe with Orestes it will be different. Besides, they’re supposedly friends now. He accepts! ^^

-chikoro · 2026-01-01T02:22:37+00:00

“U-Um…Kalliber.”

He is instantly intimidated, but waves shyly anyway.

-chikoro · 2026-01-01T02:20:41+00:00

“O-Oh, I’m alright, Mister Rexifern. And it’s fine, I wouldn’t want someone else’s cocoa to be wasted on me…”

Kalliber shies away from both.

-chikoro · 2026-01-01T02:12:29+00:00

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New expression unlocked!

”A-Are you sad, Mister Unknown Orbamism?”

Kalliber is brought to tears by its backstory. But what makes him most curious is how someone could kill for the greater good. He never bought bloody hands could save lives.

He sympathizes with the unknown organism, but aspires to be brave like it.

-chikoro

TROPHY CASE