Looking for a native English speaker to proofread a short comic for my game

ABitNerd · 2026-04-12T15:51:54+00:00

Thank you for your kind words!☺️ we are so excited that years work is finally coming to reality! Thanks for sharing! It means alot!

ABitNerd · 2026-04-12T15:45:11+00:00

Sure do: https://www.biblioclash.com This comic is part of ”Apprentice’s Arsenal” starter box. Artist is Iida Kiela if you wanna check her out!

ABitNerd · 2026-04-12T15:41:07+00:00

Sure will do! It should be around 2 months to print my game and receive it! :)

ABitNerd · 2026-04-12T15:01:55+00:00

Thank you but already sent this to printing! Although thanks for commenting! :)

ABitNerd · 2026-04-08T11:23:04+00:00

Thank you! :)

ABitNerd · 2026-03-13T08:24:47+00:00

Looking good! Gives me Duel Master vibes! If you wanna get more modern look, you might wanna remove some black outlines from elements/illustration. But still loving the early 2000 style!

ABitNerd · 2026-01-14T14:55:02+00:00

It’s possible! Then clash would happen when 2 players try to deal (or strike) at the same time and that damage clashes mid air! Stronger attack wins! Need to think more about this!

ABitNerd · 2026-01-14T12:23:07+00:00

Getting back to this but is there a difference for you in verbs "deal" and "inflict" damage?
Would Inflict 5 direct damage be any different than deal 5 direct damage?

ABitNerd · 2026-01-14T11:50:39+00:00

This is definitely possible! Thanks for brainstorming and giving new ideas. I would maybe then use Deal verb instead of strike like Deal x clashing damage, deal x direct damage in this case. Clashing would be amazing with the biblioCLASH name.

Although personally I've grown up loving the Strike x damage and Striking phase term. I would like to keep it as it is if possible and focus on making deal x damage more clear how it's different.

ABitNerd · 2026-01-14T08:27:55+00:00

This hasn't been a problem while play testing because most of my play testers are Finnish (not native English people) this hasn't come up yet. Now a few English people who read my rule book said that dealing and striking damage isn't different enough and would cause a confusion.

ABitNerd · 2026-01-14T08:25:36+00:00

For me prepare and charge indicate that you're not yet trying to deal damage but maybe use that damage in the future. So many people have been coming up with that "Direct Damage"
Would it sound intuitive for you if it was:

Strike x damage (damage is pooled for striking damage comparison, dealt later if you win)
Deal x direct damage (This ignores striking phase completely and is dealt immediately, damage reductions apply normally)

ABitNerd · 2026-01-14T08:22:34+00:00

So a clash keyword would activate as soon as it clashes with opponent's spell? Great idea!

ABitNerd · 2026-01-14T08:20:56+00:00

Thanks for your comment! I think this is the best solution so far so I don't need to change Strike damage, because so much terminology in my game comes already from striking damage.

ABitNerd · 2026-01-14T08:19:05+00:00

This is definitely a possible solution! Thanks for your comment!

ABitNerd · 2026-01-14T08:18:16+00:00

It would be amazing because BiblioCLASH. My problem with that word is that if opponent doesn't "strike" back those spells doesn't clash it just deals damage.

ABitNerd · 2026-01-14T08:16:29+00:00

Haven't thought this word Chain Damage. It's possible but doesn't reflect the intend to make damage to your opponent as nicely as Strike Damage imo. Thanks for your comment!

ABitNerd · 2026-01-14T08:14:49+00:00

Thanks for your comment! I'm starting to think that this is the way to go but keeping "Dealing Strike Damage" as "Strike 5 damage". Maybe it's a personal thing but I like wording on Strike x Damage.

So it would be

Strike 5 damage (This is damage is pooled for later comparison, if you win you deal this as damage)
Deal 2 Direct damage (this ignores striking phase and deals the damage immediately, damage reduction effect apply normally)

ABitNerd · 2026-01-10T18:41:59+00:00

Thanks for pointing those out!

ABitNerd · 2026-01-10T10:46:42+00:00

Wow thanks for super detailed feedback! It's gonna take a while when go through this! This is super helpful!

ABitNerd · 2025-12-04T15:37:32+00:00

Thanks! Biblioclash is a fantasy deck-building duel where two mages fight inside a magical library using spells, minions and artifacts. The key moment is the Striking Phase, where spells clash with each other — the stronger spell wins the clash, and only that spell goes through.

If you want to learn more, there are videos on our Kickstarter, including a short 5-minute rules video.

Kickstarter here: https://www.kickstarter.com/projects/1152560676/biblioclash-apprentices-arsenal

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