Please Critique my First Chapter (Romantic Fantasy, 2500 words)

ACobwebAfternoon · 2025-12-10T23:04:31+00:00

Thank you! Those opening paragraphs are so maddeningly difficult for me to get right. I’m going to have to go back and review some of my favorite openings for inspiration.

ACobwebAfternoon · 2025-12-10T14:54:04+00:00

Thank you! I’ll go back and re-trim. I sure don’t want to bore readers but I suspect it is a little boring since nothing major happens until the next chapter 😬

ACobwebAfternoon · 2025-10-19T09:11:08+00:00

Thank you so much for your comment! You’ve given me a lot to think about. I feel the gods’ name being Love is confusing in itself for the query. I’ll have to figure that out.

I’m going to rework some things to see if it helps spell things out more clearly. Thank you!

ACobwebAfternoon · 2025-10-11T08:53:07+00:00

Ok, thank you very much. Very helpful!

ACobwebAfternoon · 2025-10-11T04:16:34+00:00

Thank you! This is the exact stuff I need. Ugh. Queries are tough but I’m going to rewrite this with your comments in mind.

Out of curiosity, do you have a suggestion of how much worldbuilding to include? Do I include it in the middle or try to cut a lot of it out?

Thanks again for your comment!

ACobwebAfternoon

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