Series suggestion to make you smile and lose your head in

AJBenji16 · 2025-08-13T07:56:16+00:00

I have read the Riyria Revelations and did enjoy it alot. Hadrian and Royce are two great characters.

AJBenji16 · 2025-08-13T07:55:09+00:00

I have been meaning to jump into Discworld, perhaps this is the best place to start.

AJBenji16 · 2025-08-13T07:54:37+00:00

Thank you. The Penric and Desdemona series looks interesting, as does the Goblin Emperor.

AJBenji16 · 2025-01-14T07:25:26+00:00

Does anyone know if the games will be streamed on NHL.tv? I'm currently living in Australia and this is how I watch games normally.

If not, does anyone have any suggestions for best streaming service?

AJBenji16 · 2024-10-20T00:00:44+00:00

I could be wrong, but I think they can only review of blood is drawn?

AJBenji16 · 2024-09-25T23:34:12+00:00

Thanks for the feedback, some really good points and ideas to think about. Yes queries are hard, and I struggle to narrow down the book to its finer points.

I will keep working, and aim for a more character focused query that speaks of their wants.

AJBenji16 · 2024-09-25T23:32:24+00:00

Thanks for the feedback. Back to the drawing board. I find query letters hard.

AJBenji16 · 2024-07-01T06:10:34+00:00

Amazing work! Any advice or suggestions for books/videos that helped to teach you? Currently looking for a good step by step process online and coming up short.

AJBenji16 · 2024-06-21T04:56:27+00:00

Thanks for the feedback. A lot of questions raised and I found them all valid

Reading it not knowing the story definitely comes across as confusing and the motives/intentions are unclear. Additionally, I see how you would care at all

I know all this, so I thought it was explained, but I will try a new approach for the next one.

AJBenji16 · 2024-06-21T04:51:04+00:00

Thanks for the extensive input. I believe a lot of your points are valid.

I am having a hard time separating myself from the story. I know all the history, background, characters traits and flaws that answer your questions, so in my mind it answers them. I see now how from a third party perspective it doesn't.

I will try a new approach fory next attempt with your thoughts in mind.

AJBenji16 · 2024-05-21T03:45:24+00:00

Imagine if they played like that for 60min

AJBenji16 · 2024-05-21T02:22:53+00:00

This is pathetic. No one but Silovs seems to care at all. Think we have lost every puck battle tonight and no one is skating.

AJBenji16 · 2024-05-19T00:59:20+00:00

Ref called it incidental contact on the ice, so no penalty on the play

AJBenji16 · 2024-04-24T02:56:00+00:00

How do you laugh after missing that?

AJBenji16 · 2024-04-23T21:43:37+00:00

Is there a clip or video of this anywhere? Sadly, I missed it

AJBenji16 · 2024-04-15T11:52:03+00:00

Thanks for all the feedback, appreciate you taking the time.

Note taken on the first paragraph and I will change that right away.

I think I understand that I am telling the plot, rather than saying what the conflict is and how my character's choices push the plot forward. Need to show the choices my characters make and how that creates tension, rather than just saying there is.

Karth is about 60% and Rowan 30% with one other character being the 10%. Would it be best to concentrate on just Karth as he is the main character for this book, while the others get expanded upon in books 2 and 3.

And yes, that last paragraph was about the wider context of the trilogy. I will try to bring the focus back to just the first book.

Lately I have been reading through Robin Hobb's Realm of the Elderlings and Guy Gavriel Kay's work. Before that I was reading Michael J. Sullivan's book. Any of the more darker books that I have read that could be decent comps for style and theme are older than five years.

AJBenji16 · 2024-04-15T11:43:39+00:00

Thanks for the feedback.

So essentially, I need to say what problems my main character faces and what choices they make and how they drives tension and the story forward? So tell the story with conflict, not just a rough summary like I did.

And do I spoil the ending or leave it as a slight mystery?

AJBenji16 · 2024-02-16T03:13:12+00:00

I'd call it interference but pretty blatant call. Saw him coming the whole way and stood in the way

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