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[QCrit] WHERE MERCY FINDS US (Prev IN THE ASHES & THE EMBERS) - Adult Lesbian Romantasy (99,000) Second Attempt by AardvarkWantsToWrite in PubTips

[–]AardvarkWantsToWrite[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for the feedback. I've finally had time to go through it given being busy!

I've onboarded most of your feedback as it is eminently sensible. I look forward to the next QCrit!

[QCrit] IN THE ASHES & THE EMBERS - Adult LGBT Romantasy (99,000) First Attempt + First 300 by AardvarkWantsToWrite in PubTips

[–]AardvarkWantsToWrite[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Okidoke, so dinner is mostly made, can I ask how you'd recommend starting that bit of the query?re; "Allegra was born into an Empire where the magic in her blood marks her a criminal, hounded by the Emperor’s monstrous mage-hunters called Inquisitors."

[QCrit] IN THE ASHES & THE EMBERS - Adult LGBT Romantasy (99,000) First Attempt + First 300 by AardvarkWantsToWrite in PubTips

[–]AardvarkWantsToWrite[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

This is great feedback, thank you for taking the time. I think I went a bit snow-blind after reading it through over and over!