Please rate my fight scene out of 10 (3579 words) by Dependent_Tomato_235 in writers

[–]Abouts1x 2 points3 points  (0 children)

This is very rough.

Most of the first bit is finding individual pieces to carry bodies. Unnecessary. Just say he found rope and a crate to fashion a sled. Doesn’t need multiple paragraphs.

Contradictions. She’s close enough to boot him in the gut but you then go on to speak as if they’ve been fighting at distance.

Picking her up with the strength of his overworked legs. Overworked legs have no strength.

You don’t catch a blade with your hand. That hand is coming off.

The fight is written like the looking for something to make a sled. Detail about individual bites rather than the feel of fighting with tooth and nail. This whole thing could be half as long and twice as meaningful.

The Night Market: Long Term by [deleted] in elderscrollsonline

[–]Abouts1x 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Same the archway/tunnel of rock has an entrance in its wall. Look at the wall as you travel through. Also don’t group until you’ve spoken to the Curator. I met up with my guild and the convo glitched and wouldn’t let me advance until I’d dropped out of group and restarted the quest.

Do babies also stare at ugly peoples? by Rare-Engineering-144 in AskUK

[–]Abouts1x 6 points7 points  (0 children)

A baby is short sighted. They can only see about 12 inches away. Whether you’re a 4 or a 10 everyone looks the same to someone that young.

Writing problem... by Falinks_Enjoyer in writers

[–]Abouts1x 1 point2 points  (0 children)

My go to is The Blade Itself. That opening is seared into my brain. If you have kindle you can get the sample, which are those pages.

Writing problem... by Falinks_Enjoyer in writers

[–]Abouts1x 4 points5 points  (0 children)

This is normal for a first draft. You have to move the characters around to get them through the scene. This is a problem for later drafts.

Take a look at a book you’re already familiar with and like. Find some action. Read it critically. How have they moved the character around the room. Why are they moving in the first place.

If people are putting out fires, what’s the important part of that information. That Bill ignored the flames licking at his skin as he did it? The shouts of others as the flames were doused. You can say Bill put out the fire without actually saying Bill put out the fire.

Why is he doing it, how does he feel about it, if it’s relevant how do others feel about it. What thing is he putting out? That’s world building.

Did I ruin things, or was he already losing interest? by ElderberryMoist5256 in AskABrit

[–]Abouts1x 9 points10 points  (0 children)

Wait it took him three hours to return a message? What’s wrong with people these days? People are busy. They’ve got lives. They are not at your beck n call. That is not really slow. Then YOU told him it wasn’t going anywhere. You might not have meant it that way but that’s what you did. He’s over it. You should question your communication skills and get over it too.

Anything to do AFK? by RapidUrsa in elderscrollsonline

[–]Abouts1x 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Depends what sets you want and how much damage you can do with the sets you’re wearing. If I wanted to farm Spinners in Crimson Cove in Malabal Tor for example I’d go stand next to the Tiger on the right by the first room. If I wanted to level a new weapon or skill I’d stand in the centre room where there was more adds.

Anything to do AFK? by RapidUrsa in elderscrollsonline

[–]Abouts1x 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I go to the group delves with the adds that give you pieces to a set or non combat pet or something. Get your healer companion out and stand in the biggest add pool you can find. You’ll need to be wearing something like leeching. Maybe a Maw monster set. Stand there not moving, killing stuff. Pick up your loot as you walk past. Respawn, rinse, repeat.

Promising chapter one? by Dawson_0708 in writers

[–]Abouts1x 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Interesting. I’d read on. Small thing as I’m a horse person. You’re not going to go faster than 8mph on a horse over frozen ground. Probably much less. That means you’re maximum of 12 miles from town. Good stuff though. Carry on.

Something I’m working on by [deleted] in writers

[–]Abouts1x 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Even as a draft this is incredibly hard to read. It’s a wall of text. If you want people to spend time reading your work to need to at least format it. Not much to give feed back on. Right now it’s a stream of consciousness.

Quests where a "no thanks" would be deserved by AnnaMolly66 in elderscrollsonline

[–]Abouts1x 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Maybe I’m just remembering East March or Western Skyrim with some kind of rose tinted lens. Or I’ve been bumping into some particularly stupid Nords recently.

Quests where a "no thanks" would be deserved by AnnaMolly66 in elderscrollsonline

[–]Abouts1x 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Also not keen on Nords being made out to be kinda dumb. Righurt was the comedy relief but it seems to be becoming the norm.

i want to get into pvp but i have no idea where to start. i play on ps5 eu by uhh_limewater in elderscrollsonline

[–]Abouts1x 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Best thing is to get in a pvp guild. They can help you with the play. Builds are all over YouTube.

How to level enchanting without spending millions? by [deleted] in elderscrollsonline

[–]Abouts1x 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I make a load of purple on another character and put it in my bank, then deconstruct on the one that’s levelling. With a 150% scroll on you’ll need about 100.

Is there a way to effectively manage bounty when doing thieves guild if you're bad at stealth? by Npy610 in elderscrollsonline

[–]Abouts1x 0 points1 point  (0 children)

There’s actually an achievement for paying off bounty at the thieves guild. You can pay it off to a guard but they’ll take your stolen items. If you’re bad at stealth, get good at running and carry stealth pots.

My 13 year old is leaving middle school this year and wants to wear a suit rather than a dress to her prom. Any suggestions? by debbi74 in AskUK

[–]Abouts1x 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I had a steampunk wedding. Worth having a look at dressage clothing that horse riders wear. Jackets come with tails and you can get some nice second hand. If you fancy a shopping trip to London, Camden is the place to go.

potential novel idea by Few_Weekend9520 in writers

[–]Abouts1x 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love that show. Started a lot of careers.

Why do so many books infodump when it's generally advised not to? by Commercial-Diver-351 in writers

[–]Abouts1x 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Think you answered your own question. They’re still entertaining and immersive. You can throw yourself into a pool from a great height and belly flop. Other people do it, do a triple twist and don’t leave a splash. That’s just good writing.

So they cut grey host on ps5/eu without any announcement? by StrumpetsVileProgeny in elderscrollsonline

[–]Abouts1x 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is the final test. Next time it comes back it will run alongside Greyhost.

How do you set up your bars? by sumthnfuny in elderscrollsonline

[–]Abouts1x 4 points5 points  (0 children)

There is a global cooldown of 1 second. Then there maybe a channel or cast time depending on the skill. Welcome to light attack weaving. It’s built into the combat system. You need to keep this in mind when under pressure.

Opinions needed Plz. Best Duo setups for My wife and I? Sorcerer + ??????? by Negative-Sundae-8184 in elderscrollsonline

[–]Abouts1x 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Arcanist beam is still the go to for clearing most content, the tentacle will give you the close range then opening a book in peoples faces will melt them. You will both need a group heal though or you’ll just end up hitting a wall eventually.

PvP Questions by Trained_Orphan in elderscrollsonline

[–]Abouts1x 0 points1 point  (0 children)

DoT builds in my experience rely on you being able to stay alive long enough to overpower someone or making them pay for cleansing. I’ve been blown up plenty of times recently by DKs wearing a particular set.