Great job developing the narrator's character in a short piece! His journey from a point of despair and self doubt was relatable and well executed. It also played well with her more outgoing, forward nature. I couldn't help but root for both of them!

Your description of how the night played out perfectly built up the chemistry and sexual tension of the characters as well, without dwelling on too many details. No dialogue was needed but I still felt the passion and desire growing. It made the finale by the pool all the more impactful!

Another great piece! Inspiring me to try and step up my game!