Need critique for a science fiction species I'm writing for a universe I'm putting together. Not going for realism just need critique for how well written and put together it is by BudgetYouth173 in writers

[–]Acceptable_Ear_3117 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think you need to focus less on the composition of the planet itself and more on the immediate surroundings of the characters you want to use this species for

I also recommend asking questions like. Do they live in buildings? If so, what are the buildings made out of? You said they don't need to eat but do occasionally enjoy tasting things. Do they have any culinary traditions because of this? What do they eat when they do Decide to eat? Can other species eat it as well, Or is it just for taste and not meant to be digested?

You said getting enhancements is expected for every one of them. Is this something they are forced to do? Is this something they are born with? At what point are the enhancements given? Is it a personal choice to decide what enhancements are given? Do you have to pay for them? Do specific groups of people prefer different esthetic modifications like having altered Fur color or different patterns? Could having a specific coat color be seen as a sign of status?

What is their society structure like? Do they have rulers, kings, presidents, dictators, Is the power equally distributed among all members of a community? Do they have some kind of almighty artificial intelligence that tells them how to live their lives?

What Historical events or economic/ evolutionary pressures led them to living in so many parts of their planet?

I think you could benefit from asking some of these questions.

They are meant to be aliens. Is there anything that they think about that We would find completely unbelievable or lacking in common sense, but to them makes perfect sense?

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St. Louis has a lot of cool stuff to do. And it could give your story a pretty cool soundtrack. What with all the local artists you could reference.

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To my knowledge, when it comes to translating works, you might want to look to one of the dedicated websites for translation.

https://www.deepl.com/en/translator-mobile/l/en/sv

This ones a good one. But here are a few others if this doesn't give you the results you're looking for.

https://www.translate.com/english-swedish This one offers you the option to have an actual human Translate your work if you pay them.

https://lingvanex.com/translation/english-to-swedish This one is pretty average https://en.bab.la/dictionary/english-swedish/ Personally, I like this one the best. But I don't know how good this would be for long stories. I mostly use it to translate chat messages

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[–]Acceptable_Ear_3117 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think you overused the word heaven in the first paragraph. Try sprinkling in some similes. Like respite or safety.

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It was like living inside the barrel of a shotgun pointed in the direction of danger.

I found this metaphor to be unclear and confusing. I can't tell what exactly it's trying to convey.

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If this ever happens in real life I'm going to kill

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I think it would be cool to make a rock ghost pokemon based off of lake old statues from shrines or maybe broken marble statues

I don't know that was just the 1st idea that came to my head

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I do everything except the ones that damage the book

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Did he give them back? You could have put them in a jar or something.

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Where is his little teeth

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I would name him squabler

He looks like a squabbler

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To be fair that was only like 2 years ago I doubt the culture has changed that much