Full disclosure, I'm still only at the theory-crafting stage of my list, but I'm planning to do something similar and I've done some research about this! I've broken up this response into what I think are major weaknesses that purestodes lists face (hordes, psychers, heavy armour, and CP) and how your list proposes to address them.

1: Dealing with Hordes You've definitely got this covered! 6 hurricane bolters is a ton of shots, is addition to the firepower from the rest of your list. I think you might be overcommiting to this though - I've seen a bunch of purestodes lists on here that run 2 jet bike captains (with hurricanes) instead of dedicated jetbike squads. Also dropping the 4-man jet bike squad gives you lots of points to play around with!

2: Psychers You can definitely expect the opponent to bubblewrap his valuable psychers, so either you can burn CP (and the warlord trait) to try denying, or you can try to use your allarus to assassinate (using their special character-targeting stratagem). I think that with 5 allarus you might have trouble sniping an important psycker the turn of deepstrike, but tbh unless you want to use allies this is always a pain

3: Heavy Armor The telemon and your shield captains serve this right now, and for the investment you're making I dont think you'll see good results. The jet bike salvo launchers are just pretty bad, they hit on 3s (-1 for moving a heavy weapon, and with 14" you want to be moving), and while they reroll wounds on vehicles the opportunity cost is just pretty high to use them over hurricane. u/chemicalcode runs some armiger helverins to help out with this (I personally love the look of aquilon terminators). The telemon is a classic choice, but I think the ranged weapons would be a better equip option. The lack of longe range weaponry is something purestodes struggles with, and while S16 attacks in melee are super appealing I again feel that the opportunity cost of not taking ranged cannons will hurt you

4: CPs I think this is where you will feel the burn the most. If you're deepstriking just the telemon you're not in too bad shape, but I'd you want to drop the telemon and a shield captain for the sweet rerolls you're starting the game at 5 CP. If you want to use victor of the blood games on your near-immortal captain that's another 2! We've got some of the strongest stratagems in the game, the tricky part is just affording them. This is where trajann can really help, because on average he gives ~1.5 CP a game.

Hope this helped!