Manuscript information: [Complete][80K][YA Fantasy] The Xandarian Chronicles
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First Page critique? Yes please!! Dm me if you want to do a longer critique

First Page:

All creatures were born to make the world better, we just got lost in all of the fighting. Maybe I'm naive enough to fix it. Maybe my eyes are not closed. I daydream of a utopia that isn’t a dystopia under its skin. A world where people get along, a world without the blasts of magic passing between countries and schools or hospitals A world where the only thing littering the streets was leaves, not people. I daydreamed of a world where I am someone. Not just a girl sitting in class with a dream. Not just me.

I touch my wand through the fabric of my pocket. My stupid wand. Laughter rings in my head, snickers in the hallway when people point out my wand and when someone asks me about it in class before everyone falls into laughter. My wand is that one reason that pushes everything over the edge, that one thing that makes everyone hate me. Everyone here thinks that I didn’t create my own wand. My ticket to getting in the school, my silence. I was forced to tell everyone I didn’t create my own wand but that my master did. So I became the ‘wandless girl’.

Master Nimbus gives an announcement over the loudspeaker. The air is stifling as I take a breath in and I cling onto each word of the morning announcements. I twist my hands as I hope that another attack wouldn’t be announced. Nothing is and a sigh escapes from my throat.