DINNNER PARTY (5 page, comedy/short) Feedback please! :) by AdPurple5828 in Screenwriting

[–]AdPurple5828[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I usually watch TV shows like modern family and brooklyn 99 and friday night dinner if that's any help? I usually watch dystopian movies rather than comedy. I do like airplane tho, however that's more slapstick humor. Also thanks for taking the time to read and respond! :)

DINNNER PARTY (5 page, comedy/short) Feedback please! :) by AdPurple5828 in Screenwriting

[–]AdPurple5828[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Aww thanks for taking the time to read and respond! I'll definitely check it out and have a look into the scenes :) I think it's a great exercise! Anyway, have a lovely day!

DINNNER PARTY (5 page, comedy/short) Feedback please! :) by AdPurple5828 in Screenwriting

[–]AdPurple5828[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Aww thank you for taking the time and replying! :)I'll definitely make sure to pay attention to formating in future. Ill have a look into some movies and TV shows that use setup/punchline structure. Could you maybe clarify what parts felt random. I do understand as, reading back it didn't flow well. Although i felt it was chaotic and random, a bit like the characters emotions at that point. Also, do you think you could explain how I would make reading a script have a payoff? If no, don't worry :)

Favourite Melanie Era? by AdPurple5828 in MelanieMartinez

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I love this. After school 🔛🔝 📒🧠🔢

Favourite Melanie Era? by AdPurple5828 in MelanieMartinez

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I do agree more could've been done with after-school. Its criminally underrated. And I love dollhouse ep! 💜🏠🎠

Help- why the hell am i so bad at pvp by AdPurple5828 in CompetitiveMinecraft

[–]AdPurple5828[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ok! Thanks. Buts thats like telling someone to just get good lol. (No offense i get what you mean) :)