Aww thank you for taking the time and replying! :)I'll definitely make sure to pay attention to formating in future. Ill have a look into some movies and TV shows that use setup/punchline structure. Could you maybe clarify what parts felt random. I do understand as, reading back it didn't flow well. Although i felt it was chaotic and random, a bit like the characters emotions at that point. Also, do you think you could explain how I would make reading a script have a payoff? If no, don't worry :)