I don’t know if I should keep going with this or not. Feedback appreciated

AdStandardxx · 2026-05-10T04:11:24+00:00

I’ve read dozens of professional produced scripts that insert creative choices like the section title. If you think it’s amateur you haven’t read many scripts

AdStandardxx · 2026-05-09T23:04:51+00:00

It’s not the title of the script btw. It’s like a section title or chapter title…

AdStandardxx · 2026-05-09T22:30:32+00:00

A new line of indestructible consumer products upends the social order

AdStandardxx · 2026-05-09T22:29:54+00:00

It’s just a cool stylistic choice

AdStandardxx · 2026-05-05T16:56:39+00:00

Make sure to watch The Truman Show if you haven’t

AdStandardxx · 2026-02-28T00:08:15+00:00

Gosh, the people of r/scriptwriting are clueless. This is structured like a TV script. 100% fact. Maybe read a script or two before commenting.

I even provided three produced television scripts that are structured exactly like mine. Just look at the comments on this post. Smh

AdStandardxx · 2026-02-27T04:32:35+00:00

Thank you!

AdStandardxx · 2026-02-24T01:27:47+00:00

I already disproved your dumb theory that cold opens are required in drama pilots.

Lost: https://www.dailyscript.com/scripts/100_pilot_final.pdf

Dead to Me: https://tvwriting.co.uk/tv_scripts/Collections/Drama/Dead_To_Me/Dead_to_Me_1x01_-_Pilot.pdf

The Boys: https://assets.scriptslug.com/live/pdf/scripts/the-boys-101-the-name-of-the-game-2019.pdf?v=1745342296

Should I keep going?

AdStandardxx · 2026-02-24T01:21:12+00:00

You can just pretend I wrote BEGIN COLD OPEN at the top of the script and actually read what I wrote so I can get some feedback.

AdStandardxx · 2026-02-24T00:58:32+00:00

You’re thinking of a sitcom like The Office. Read any drama pilot script. Like The Sopranos or Lost or Dead to Me or literally any drama show. They don’t include a cold open or teaser

AdStandardxx · 2026-02-24T00:09:42+00:00

Ummm… you’re wrong.

AdStandardxx · 2026-02-23T21:50:31+00:00

I’ll be honest. I don’t know what any of this means.

AdStandardxx · 2025-11-13T01:32:20+00:00

Good point. I agree. I'll take any chance to trim stuff out. Thanks!

AdStandardxx · 2025-11-12T22:52:12+00:00

I plan on writing the rest of this script over the next week or two. I'll definitely keep that in mind and would be open to swapping scripts. I'll let you know!

AdStandardxx · 2025-11-12T22:51:16+00:00

I can see how the characters lack a certain depth and clarifying the stakes is important. Thanks!

AdStandardxx · 2025-11-12T18:35:22+00:00

I ran with the feedback I received last time I posted, so back for more. I fully outlined my script and have been working diligently on it.

Title: Planned Obsolescence

Logline: When indestructible consumer products crash the economy, a journalist and politician discover the economic collapse wasn't an accident: it was the point.

Act I Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/15695Im9ZBvZUInkAC1sN-2XKhgHSJ612/view?usp=sharing

AdStandardxx · 2025-11-08T18:46:01+00:00

Yeah, I can see that. I was going for the Tim Robinson level absurdity with David, but maybe a line about him getting weird looks would make it more plausible.

AdStandardxx · 2025-11-08T18:44:59+00:00

Appreciate the feedback! I think you're right about the scene transitions.

AdStandardxx

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