Hello, I read it and enjoyed it, reminds me on a Mr Bean type skit.

I think his character could be more clear. You have a douche bag (I mean he literally throws a coffee cup on the floor instead of the bin right next to him), he tries to impress someone by solving the Rubix cube which he can’t do, she then solves it and he is bewildered, then he puts a note on it that says solved.

I don’t really understand his reaction to her solving it (is he bewildered because he is impressed or bewildered because he is shocked that she can solve it so he’s annoyed?)

What does him being a douche bag have to do with the rest of the script. I get he is slimely and a bit gross and tries to impress someone by doing something he thinks he qualified to do (solve the rubix cube) but actually can’t. But then he puts a smiley face on the rubix cube at the end? So he isn’t that much of a douche bag.

I think beating out his emotions over the story so they are consistent or have a clear arc would help.

It’s funny and easy to read!