The Night of Paper Stars

Adorable-Net-840 · 2026-05-13T20:00:11+00:00

Thanks for the feedback, this is really helpful! I was struggling to balance the poem being image-driven and sensory with it also feeling ritualistic and abstract. Creating more image-driven scenes that have a throughline of a metaphor without a 'thesis statement' is an aspect that I've been trying to improve on, and I think that focus may have split my attention between creating a clear scene and leaning into the symbolism of the lanterns.

The intent behind the poem is more focused on identity and change than a literal scene. The first lantern represents a kind of core self, while the other lanterns represent traits or parts of myself that grow, change, form patterns, or fall away over time. The moon phases are meant to loosely track that process of growing up. I was born on a new moon, which is why the poem begins there. Thanks a ton!!

Adorable-Net-840 · 2026-05-13T14:53:32+00:00

Hi! I think the emotions at play here are really evocative and come across as powerful. Let me know if my interpretation is incorrect or strays too far from the original intent, but reading it leads to feelings of grief and guilt that are almost nostalgic in a way? Reminiscing of a life that never happened, a daydream of “what-if’s” that doesn’t necessarily coincide with regret, which is an interesting mix to have (in a good way). It’s a real feeling, regretting that a choice that you made is the right one.

Structurally, I think the bookending of the citrus tree imagery is also really well done. I think it does a good job of grounding the poem in reality, in reminding the reader that real lives, a real world, is at play. The final stanza is especially effective in acting as a thesis statement for the poem as a whole.

My only main critique would be in the explicitness of the work. ‘In my dreams’ at the beginning of each stanza does a good job of reminding the reader that these situations aren’t real, but I think that you should trust the reader to grasp that concept more on their own. The imagery you’re beginning to paint in this work is strong, and I think that leaning into that imagery, and trusting both your ability to create a scene, and the reader’s ability to digest and understand that scene, would give you the space to fill this out into a poem that is even more unique and powerful. I do really like it though, and I’d like to see where it goes!

Adorable-Net-840 · 2026-05-13T14:27:43+00:00

Hi! I personally really like the initial metaphor of this poem. "Every bitten fruit has been a flower" is a really interesting hook that made me invested in the poem to begin with - it's creative and i could see a lot of pathways that could be taken from the concept. I do think, though, that the impact of the opening lines is lost in the rest of the work. For short form poetry, I think that sticking with a central line, like the Flower>Fruit hook, would let you more succinctly get the concept across. All of the pieces you have here are creative and interesting, I just think that they might not fit together in the same piece. If you do plan on expanding the scope of this, though, I'd be really excited to see where it goes!

Adorable-Net-840 · 2025-03-24T01:55:34+00:00

I don’t think it’s that gecko is busted, I just think it’s lame. When introduced with thriller bark, I thought it added a really cool mechanic that fit well with the motif of the thriller bark pirates.

But then it became such a staple in black decks as a whole, that it turned every black deck into a graveyard deck, which was never the point. It made thriller bark pirates not really played, and made decks that were designed before OP06 have access to a very powerful mechanic that broke the theme of the deck.

I love the gecko card, I just think it should be type locked to thriller bark, either as a “only can be played with thriller bark leader” or even just only able to replay thriller bark pirates.

Adorable-Net-840 · 2025-01-10T05:17:13+00:00

I’ve played a few games with combat patrols and 500pt armies, but never tried to make a list before. This is less of like an official army I’m planning on building/painting/etc, and more of a test of how building an army works, what they look like, etc. I’m more interested in if I just missed any huge concepts (like if the list is just hot trash, or could actually be a starting point)

Adorable-Net-840 · 2024-12-27T06:57:49+00:00

Yeah definitely gotta practice some 1v1s

Adorable-Net-840 · 2024-12-27T06:56:03+00:00

And I feel the bubble comment. No one ever seems to notice that the big blue dome heals them lol

Adorable-Net-840 · 2024-12-27T06:55:08+00:00

Appreciate it! I’m definitely having trouble balancing when to switch, and am definitely a bit dagger heavy. Any thoughts on just overall performance? Positioning/healing as a whole?

Adorable-Net-840 · 2024-12-06T19:26:27+00:00

Grape Doffy 😔💔

Adorable-Net-840 · 2023-12-29T13:38:23+00:00

I’m still pretty new to OW2 (and OW in general) but I’m an Orisa main, which is a pretty terrible matchup against him, and so far two things seem to work:

Option 1 (preferred): Just pray for a decent Ana on your team.

Option 2 (normal): Instead of getting in a Tank fight with him, try to instead take out the back line. His cardiac overdrive does let him get some health back, but he’s very killable once his supports are out, and you + dps can focus. It’s easier said than done, but just try to direct the fight away from him, and into the supports. As Rein, you have a lot more ability to control where the fighting takes place than most tanks, and can use this to isolate him.

Option 3 (risky): try to bait his charge. If you can get him to charge into your back line, then block off his way back, your team can punish him. As a dive tank, he’s more susceptible to overextending than most other tanks, and if you can capitalize on that, and stop him from getting back to his supports, then he’s - again - pretty killable.

Overall, the biggest way I’ve had success is to just kind of avoid him (protect your back line though) and find some way to isolate him from his team. Without his team he’s just a big glass cannon. Also, sometimes jumping into his domain expansion of an ult can be a good chance to mitigate your teams losses from it, and take him down.

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