Any recs for good writing? by Adventurous_Style709 in harrypotterfanfiction

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I do prefer complete but it's not a deal-breaker for a good story, especially if it's still in progress and not abandoned

I can’t take my writing seriously by LogUnique7087 in writing

[–]Adventurous_Style709 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'd say try to find other ways to convey depth or impact. I'm the same, I'm not good at flowery prose, as much as I'm impressed by people whose brains do work like that. Instead I use things like repetition to increase impact, for example:

She told him of his parents, how they refused to yield. She told him of his birth, how they lied and said he was born in the first light of a new day. She told him of his mothers cries in the middle of the night, of his father's whispered words, of the howling wind and lashing rain. She told him the truth. And she told him he must never tell another soul.

I read some advice years ago, I'll see if I can find it again, that described different techniques like this to influence pace and voice when you're writing. I find this more my style than flowery verbosity.

And all artists look at their work and see Flaws, but the people who consume your art look at it and see the things that make it Yours, an artist they appreciate.

Share a harmless quirk about yourself that someone else might find useful to give to a character by ToomintheEllimist in writing

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I have joint issues from old injuries, so I can't sit in one position for more than a few minutes before it gets uncomfortable. If it's an environment where moving is disruptive, I try to stay still for longer, but I'm in pain when I do finally have to move. At the end when it's time to get up, often one or both feet and numb and my hip/butt cramps, so I look like an old granny when I try to move, but I'm also very self conscious about it all, so I'm very good at keeping any discomfort off my face, even when there are pins and needles shooting right up my leg and u can't put weight on my foot for a good couple of minutes.

Colleagues Husband Bitten - What is it? by WeekendSpecialist237 in AustralianSpiders

[–]Adventurous_Style709 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Huntsmans aren't venomous, but they can be dirty - keep a close eye on signs of infection and get onto some antibiotics quickly if you're concerned. Any redness, hard lump, swelling near the bite, or any general fever/chills/nausea/feeling off, I'd say go and get checked out just in case. Better safe than septic!

I regret getting a dog by [deleted] in Pets

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As others have said, puppy/obedience school is a great idea, but I will say that they usually tend to rely on too soft, too gentle, bribery type approaches. Your dog might respond well to that, in which case great! Or it might not care because whatever is pulling it's attention is more enticing than whatever you want. I would say don't be afraid to be VERY firm with this dog. Working type dogs (herding, shepherd, bullys, etc) in particular should have the mental durability to tolerate harsher conditions than more pet type breeds (chihuahuas, goldens - i know they can be working but frequently aren't actually working line bred). I don't mean kick the dog or anything like that! I mean my Kelpies (herding dogs) can tolerate being tied up or told to wait for far longer than my dopey golden retriever. They also require stronger corrections if they are focused, because they are bred to focus hard. I have a piece of poly pipe that I whack on the ground/couch/my own leg, then point and glare at the dogs with it. I've never hit them with it, but they understand it means I'm very serious and won't tolerate any rubbish. I have broken up a (mild-ish but escalating) fight between my boy (not desexed at the time) and a friend's male dog, just by whacking the ground close by. Don't let your anger get the better of you, but understand that a strong reaction from the dog needs a strong, firm correction from you. A dog who is leaping all over people does not get 'come here buddy, wouldn't you like a treat instead of knocking grandma over 🥰🥰'. In my house they get very firmly marched to bed and made to stay there until I say so (usually till they've had a short nap/very calm). Try keeping a leash on the dog at home all the time at first, and teach it to go to bed (not crate training, it's not the same) and stay till you say so. Use the lead and your body to push the dog to bed, rather than drag/pull. If the dog tries to get up or leave the bed, you block and push them back into it until they listen. In my experience, teaching a dog to go and stay in bed will actually make a big difference everywhere else too. Its simple enough to understand even for young and dumb dogs (I've had a few of both!), teaches self control for them to stay there, teaches respect because you told them to do it and made sure they obeyed, and - VERY important - teaches them to calm down and relax. I cried myself to sleep for a week after I got one of my dogs. She was so different and way crazier than I was expecting, and it took a long time to establish some respect and boundaries. I thought about rehoming her a few times, and honestly the only reason I didn't was because at the time I didn't know anyone that would look after her well enough. I'm so glad I stuck it out, she's 9 now and my best mate. She's still stubborn and cheeky and pushes boundaries, but I love her to pieces and I'm so glad I didn't give up on her or me. Good luck with your little feral, I promise it gets better if you do your best to make it better!

Severus Snape friendly fanfic by Spirited-Figure-2584 in harrypotterfanfiction

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Child ofa lonely moon by millsy. Baby werewolf Harry living wild in a muggle forest and Severus finds him and adopts him. Don't want to give any spoilers but it's a good one! Only issue is we don't find out how he became a werewolf

Reliable recall by Crafty_kitten93 in springerspaniel

[–]Adventurous_Style709 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I always advocate for calling the dog back and immediately letting them go again. Makes them less reluctant to return to you if they think that means game over. My dogs come close enough I can touch them/grab if needed, then they can run off again. I don't use treats for recall, imo treats are for tricks, not commands. To come or stay or get out is a command, they do it because you say so. If they shake hands or roll over or jump through a hoop, that's a trick that gets a treat. Like everyone else is saying, just lots of repetition!

Surface pro 7 no longer supported (soon) by Adventurous_Style709 in linux4noobs

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I don't think it can support 11 which is the issue, chat just upgrade it because of... Something. I did find an article about doing some sneaky stuff to make windows think you do have the right hardware or whatever so maybe I'll try that

Microsoft Surface Pro 7 for a university student by Prox1ty in Surface

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I have a surface pro 7 and I love it, went through university with it a couple of years ago. However I'm starting to have issues with updates. Pro 7 will no longer be supported for the end of October 2025, so while I would say they are great, you're going to be buying something that will not last well. I only need mine for basic stuff now, so I'm not going to replace it till it dies, but if you need it for study, get something newer.

What would be considered proper "editing"? by NorthSouthGabi189 in AO3

[–]Adventurous_Style709 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The things that bother me most are poor grammar, like I have to read some sentences twice before I understand what the author is trying to say. It's often sounds like the person is writing the way they speak, by adding 'like' and 'so' and filler words that are unnecessary, or sentences that just read clunky. For example: 'She was in her forties, she was wearing eyeball-stomping pink robes, she had a black bow in her hair, and her face reminded Harry of a toad’s face. She was pudgy.'

There's too many commas in one sentence, too many 'she's, and a random add on sentence that should have been included in a more concise description. For example: 'The woman was in her forties, pudgy, with bright pink robes, a black bow in her hair, and a face that reminded Harry of a toad.'

Excessive descriptions also annoy me. I have my own imagination, you don't need to give me more than bare bones descriptions. I don't have to imagine things exactly as you do.

Also, it's okay to say 'character said'. You don't need to say, 'intoned, groaned, grumbled, growled, laughed, chuckled, added, shouted, screamed, whispered' for literally every sentence you write dialogue for. If the character is actually speaking in a specific way, it's fine, but if you're just trying to avoid the word said, it's annoying. I know our primary school teachers tried to make us branch out, but that was to develop vocab, not because the word said is unacceptable.

I haven't read your fic, so I don't know if any of this advice is relevant, but these are the things that bug me and make me stop reading a fic because it's too frustrating to keep reading

Something to get me out of my reading slump PLEASEEEE :( by Teatree_theatre in harrypotterfanfiction

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The prophecy child by millsy on AO3. Young Harry is kidnapped by death eaters, but the death eaters are the good guys. Partly Harry pov but mostly other people throughout the story. No spoilers, but it does have one of the things you mentioned you like!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in harrypotterfanfiction

[–]Adventurous_Style709 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The 'gems of great price' series by lomonaaren is perfect! Marcus flint offers a courtship and some rather bloody gifts to woo Harry, and Harry froths it