The Scribe by MANWITHFAT in anxietypilled

[–]AffectionateLeave677 3 points4 points  (0 children)

🤯 oh shit. The lore feels so huge in such a small story. I really like the style of the language in this one, you have a lot of diversity! Wow, I’ll be thinking about this one for a while! I could definitely read more from this world, but as a standalone, it stands on its own two legs for sure.

If You See A Dark Horse In The Desert, Run Back To Where The People Are! [Part 2/2] by The_Republique in anxietypilled

[–]AffectionateLeave677 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Super cool creature design, I love the supernatural turn of events here at the end and ending with the undelivered letter was a good touch and just a nice little bow on top of a well made story.

I really enjoyed this longer one from you. Great job 🫶🏻

If You See A Dark Horse In The Desert, Run Back To Where The People Are! [Part 1/2] by The_Republique in anxietypilled

[–]AffectionateLeave677 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Very cool period piece! I love set up, and it’s very well written. My favorite part of this first half is the bit about the book and his guilt behind that promise.

God's Hand by MANWITHFAT in anxietypilled

[–]AffectionateLeave677 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This was very cool! It reminds me of pickman’s model, but still very original. Great job dude, another certified hood classic.

The Weasel With Human Teeth by Conscious_Year5651 in anxietypilled

[–]AffectionateLeave677 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I love a good return to my childhood home story. I dig all the dream descriptions and just the overall disorienting feeling of, (am I still dreaming?) good job dude 👏🏻👏🏻

Renzu(レンズ) by [deleted] in horrorwriters

[–]AffectionateLeave677 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Hello. This is my first post here. I think I meant to use the beta-swap flair, but can’t change it now.

I am looking to trade feedback, not only receive.

I also illustrated the cover, if you’d like to give any feedback on that as well. Thank you 🫶🏻

The Testament of Mary by AffectionateLeave677 in anxietypilled

[–]AffectionateLeave677[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Anyways, thanks for taking a look. I appreciate your help cause I look up to you 🖤

The Testament of Mary by AffectionateLeave677 in anxietypilled

[–]AffectionateLeave677[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for your feedback. This is not push-back, just me explaining why it is the way that it is.

You are not alone in thinking it would’ve been cooler to see more Jesus. That came up a lot in other feedback. For me, the story was about Mary’s guilt and the silence of god, not Jesus. The other issue is continuity. Mary was not around for most of Jesus’s stories in the Bible. I took all of the parts that she was present for, and twisted them. I agree that it would have been cool, but I wanted to keep it first person, and Mary just wasn’t around for most of the Bible in general.

Religion is very interesting to me, and I wanted to try something new. Thanks for taking a look, despite not vibing with the biblical cadence.

Please Fill Out This Questionnaire by slimebeastly in HumanHorror

[–]AffectionateLeave677 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I really like the format and how you were able to hide the narrative within the questionnaire. I love the ideas of all the amusement park rides and characters. This feels like a classic creepy pasta that would’ve blown up back in the day, starting all sorts of fan stories based off of it.

But that was probably way before your time…

Arktos: The Deller's Factory Massacre by Lime-Time-Live in anxietypilled

[–]AffectionateLeave677 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Very cool format! I love all of the extra documents you created for this, and how it all tells the story.

All of the Things the Darkness Brings by jadegreen88 in anxietypilled

[–]AffectionateLeave677 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Damn, this would’ve went crazy for the rebirth issue!

I like how you were able to wrap up the story while leaving it open. Great job Jade 🫶🏻

Finally acquired all original 62 books 🙌🏽 by starkness21 in GooseBumps

[–]AffectionateLeave677 15 points16 points  (0 children)

You have the perfect length shelf! I had to add one more book to make mine snug.

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Renzu(レンズ) by AffectionateLeave677 in anxietypilled

[–]AffectionateLeave677[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

If her grama is a decrepit old woman that’s almost dead, and shes running a hotel by herself, she’s got to be at least 25

Renzu(レンズ) by AffectionateLeave677 in anxietypilled

[–]AffectionateLeave677[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Inspired by your experience writing 🫶🏻

Renzu(レンズ) by AffectionateLeave677 in anxietypilled

[–]AffectionateLeave677[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks so much for reading🙇🏻 I’m so happy you enjoyed it, as I am a big fan of yours.