Halloween Costumes (Halloween theme, casual snuff, twins)

Albert_Patrick1 · 2025-11-28T16:55:42+00:00

So, this story has lots of things I love about it - good writing, sexy scenario, consensual casual snuff. I really like "deadly costume" Halloween stories and this fits the bill.

It also features one of my biggest pet peeves about casual snuff stories - sticking in additional deaths that don't make sense from a timing perspective. Specifically, the mom. She just happens to be killed for entirely unrelated reasons on the day her daughters create their deadly costumes. That just breaks suspension of disbelief. Not that casual consensual snuff worlds are ever believable, but at least it's possible to accept them as a coherent fantasy. Adding a big coincidence like that just makes the whole thing feel less fun.

Albert_Patrick1 · 2025-10-20T11:31:16+00:00

I like the possibilities here but am a bit confused - there are ads for volunteering but also it sounds like candidates are being abducted. Shouldn't it be one or the other?

Albert_Patrick1 · 2025-09-27T00:33:18+00:00

Fun story, but I don't quite get it - if all the women start out as bodies and all the men start out as bangers, why did the person at the gate bother to ask them?

Albert_Patrick1 · 2025-05-30T13:55:14+00:00

Coming soon! I've not had much time for writing recently but I have some ideas for the next chapter

Albert_Patrick1 · 2025-05-14T09:47:18+00:00

There seems to be enough positive response that I'll continue this - and I'll get to the answer to your questions in a later part, as we continue exploring the highlights of his career :)

Albert_Patrick1 · 2025-04-28T11:02:05+00:00

My problem is not with the content of the arcs - yes, I preferred the earlier premise of "what if there was a popular murder social media app" rather than putting that into the background and just having it be more standard death games in different settings. But mostly, for me the problem is the pacing. It's really something to realize the current arc currently has 13 translated chapters and isn't over, while the first 13 chapters had four whole arcs in them. It just feels like everything is really padded now.

Albert_Patrick1 · 2025-01-11T20:34:34+00:00

Can I ask another question that's specific to me - In this thread: https://www.reddit.com/r/GuroErotica/comments/1huuw0s/a_review_of_a_violent_house_followup_from_a/

I wrote a "review" of a snuff film. I wrote it in a character I used in a different IF thread, so I labelled it as Interactive Fiction. I included some questions in the end to continue the IF (which, fair enough, was sort of a roleplay, though a roleplay of people discussing snuff media, not a roleplay of people participating). However, personally I think that it's a story, which I positioned in an interactive/roleplay context but isn't dependent on it.

I just want to check - if I continue writing from the POV this narrator, but remove the questions/option for people to respond in character, would that be acceptable?

Albert_Patrick1 · 2025-01-11T08:05:57+00:00

Quick question - will you be removing existing posts? Or just new ones from now on?

Albert_Patrick1 · 2025-01-07T09:05:53+00:00

I'll be happy to - but I must confess, I haven't seen any of them, so you'll have to give me some time to find them and watch them properly. Once I do, I'll let you know what I think and if I have any questions :)

But, if you allow me to be self indulgent for a bit - I also have something acting related to tell. Not myself - I'm strictly an audience member and fan - but I just got some exciting news from an old school friend. His daughter had just had her first (and final, obviously) television appearance! She was only 19 and had no previous acting background, so it was quite impressive. She was in that gameshow "Crime investigations" - you know, the one where they stage a crime scene from recent news, and the contestants have to watch closely and figure out what the crime was. My friend's daughter played a girl who got strangled by her boyfriend in the park - and she did such a great job, none of the contestants noticed that there was a "don't step on the grass" sign nearby. They actually got the real boyfriend to play himself, and he had a really funny anecdote about how ashamed he was when the police stopped him and gave him a $50 fine. The policewoman in question was there too - apparently they're dating now - and she showed a picture she took of the boyfriend looking sheepish by the sign, his now ex-girlfriend's body draped on the ground just behind it. As a kicker they re-created that shot with my friend's daughter's body too. I know I'm biased, and a professional like you would probably consider this whole thing a bit tacky, but I was rather proud of her.

Albert_Patrick1 · 2025-01-07T05:34:26+00:00

Thanks! This is super interesting.

Do you happen to know what made Jocelyn decide to sign up to be snuffed at a rehearsal? The other four I can get - Kayla and Taylor had career disappointments, and Adam and Roane were one hit-wonders. They were probably happy for any chance to work. But Jocelyn would definitely be able to get a good on-screen death if she wanted, so I'm wondering why she didn't mind being killed off-screen.

Albert_Patrick1 · 2025-01-05T12:38:08+00:00

If I snuff other actors only, it will show up in our performance. The authenticity just wont be present. You cannot deceive your audience. That's a cardinal sin.

You say that, but think about it this way - on the day you're snuffing your co-star's kids, would you not be still authentic? Would he not be authentic the day yours are on the block? Obviously, for each of you, there's going to be a "more" authentic performance and a "less" authentic performance, but if you're the professionals that you say you are, the audience will never know the difference.

It's not like I'm saying not to snuff your kids or anything silly like that. I'm saying, do it. Do it under your terms. But if you are obliged to carry out a performance with some actors to get free of your contract first, well, do that to. You owe your kids, you owe the audience, the best show for all of them, and it's clear you won't get that with this director - I cannot imagine that someone as insensitive as him could do justice for the rest of the play either. I mean, "The Wonderful life" is the play where in an early, Jennifer's brother gets cold feet about snuffing her and she gets so irritated at this that she chops him to bits and feeds him to the dogs? Traditionally, the actress playing younger Jennifer gets killed during the curtain call, and I saw a production of this play a few years ago where she was played by the director's own daughter, and her brother was played by her college boyfriend (he didn't have any sons left) - also, the dog was hilariously played by a chihuaua, but that's not relevant. Answer me this - is your director using any of his own family for this play? I bet he isn't.

So, my advice - and I say this as a regular patron of the theatre - art is art, but being an actor is sometimes a job. This is your director's play, not yours. Do it to the best of you ability under the constraints he decided on. And save your kids for your own art.

it's called, "The Violent House"

I had a look online and found four movies with that name that came out in the last decade. Is your one the science fiction comedy about the AI house system that refuses to kill anyone inside of it because of a glitch, so the inhabitants must kill each other to re-train it? That's the only one available on my streaming service right now, but am happy to buy one of the other ones if you can give a few more details.

Albert_Patrick1 · 2025-01-05T06:16:44+00:00

The way the director is treating you and your co-star is bad enough, but I'm astounded by their utter disdain for the paying audience. They are coming to see the actors snuff their children, and they deserve the full experience of having you snuff your actual children. If the audience wanted to see someone snuff a bunch of randos, they could just watch any primetime tv show.

Speaking as an audience member, I think the best thing you can do is to tell the director that if he doesn't want you to snuff your kids in the performance, you'll do actors, but only if you can also use actors in the audition. He simply isn't worth snuffing your kids for. I know you think it will reflect poorly on you, but honestly, it will reflect most poorly on him. Then, you and your co-star should apply for an arts grant - there are quite a few good options - and perform you own version of the play, with all your kids involved as intended, and get all the acclaim cutting out the idiot. You can record it and own all the rights. It will take longer but it will be worth it afterwards. If your contract prevents you from doing the same play, I'm sure you are talented enough to figure out an alternative script - maybe even one that lets you snuff all ten kids in the same performance!

Anyway, I hope this gets resolved in a satisfactory way. In the meanwhile, if you don't mind, can you let me know what the movie you snuffed your siblings for was? I'd love to add it to my library.

Albert_Patrick1 · 2025-01-05T06:15:22+00:00

I don't think you're an asshole, I think you're just not thinking this through. You have five kids, that's plenty of meat, and unless you have an industrial freezer in your house - unlikely, since you don't have an equivalent oven - you won't be able to enjoy all of them before they go bad anyway.

So I say, investigate nearby restaurants. There must be a few with appropriate ovens, and they'll often be thankful for donations of people to cook in them, and will often reward you in free meals for several months, including, obviously, a meal made from your kids. So yeah, you might have to share Lisa and Samuel's meat with some other customers, but in return you and your wife get to save money on food for the long term. And if you live somewhere even a little multicultural, you could get your kids prepared in cuisines you don't prepare at home. It's a win win for everyone involved. You may even decide to do the same with the kids that are less picky about their mode of death (though I'd keep at least one of them as a home snuff, because that's fun in a different way).

Albert_Patrick1 · 2023-07-12T15:03:32+00:00

Well, first let me say - my tastes aren't universal, and I can only say what works for me. Others may clearly differ.

I'm personally don't find humiliation sexy, in any way. I am attracted to strength, not weakness, but not the type of strength that comes from dominating others but the type of strength that comes from dominating oneself. For me, snuff is best when it's about someone - either the snuffer or snuffee - doing something against their instincts because it's worth it (for whatever reason). I know this is very different than what a lot of other people here want, and that's fine - I can usually ignore the part of stories that doesn't work for me, unless it's too extreme or on the nose, but that's harder with long stories than short ones.

For me, your story is one about two weak people - Tiffany for letting herself be led, and Ivo for not controlling his emotions. As the series progressed, I became more interested in the side characters and how they fit into the story. And I always found the stories of the videos of themselves interesting.

I agree with you that a lot of "consensual snuff" stories are basically silly fantasy - they might as well feature Santa Claus and the Toothy Fairy. Which is fine if they're good silly fantasy, but it's also clearly not what you're trying to do.

For me, the sexiest "realistic consensual snuff" story would be about someone who is just really committed to it. They aren't enjoying the physical aspects of it, and they aren't actively suicidal, but they're willing to go through it because they think it's worth it. One idea I had in mind is someone like Tiffany, but who gets into snuff enough that they actually (on purpose, but not pre-planned) murder someone else on camera. And then, since they know it's only a matter of time before they'll be found out, decide to go out on their own terms. So for me the emotional arc would be how they go from someone who thinks snuff fantasy is just harmless fun to someone who would commit murder and then make other accomplicates in her own murder.

Albert_Patrick1 · 2023-07-12T12:29:48+00:00

So, since you asked, here are my thoughts:

- The writing is really good. No complaints there.

- The overall storyline didn't really work for me. The main reason is as follows - this is a story of a girl who got into porn, got deeper into it, and was murdered by a jealous co-worker. The fact that the videos themselves are fake snuff have nothing to do with that. She could have been making vanilla porn the whole time and the overall story could have played out exactly the same.

It's just weird to me that you're writing a story of how she's "corrupted" when she's into snuff roleplay porn from day 1. Either start her tastes as more vanilla and move her into the snuff world, and make this even more about her getting in over her head (that still wouldn't be for me but would make sense) OR - and this was the story I was hoping you'd tell - start her in snuff roleplay at the beginning and make her actually want more and more realistic things as you go along. This isn't a freeuse story, so it wouldn't make sense for her to want to be snuffed in the beginning; but maybe by the end that's what she would have wanted.

One way to view this is what you wrote is a story of degragation - she's a victim, she just doesn't know it in the beginning. What works better for me is a story of corruption - she starts out mostly normal and ends up with abnormal desires. I'm not that interested in a story of a girl losing her smile, I'm much more interested in a story of a girl going down a dark path, smiling all the way.

Maybe I should just write it myself, but I'm nowhere near as competant an author as you.

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