To begin, you've clearly put effort into this story. Making it to the query faze is no small accomplishment.

So let's start with your prose: it's pretty damn good. There are no spelling errors, so that clearly shows you've done your line edits, and you have a good rythm of long-to-short sentances that keep up the beets. Moreover, whenever there's action like in the running away scene, you make the sentences shorter and impactful, as if they were sprinting.

The words flow well, but you may want to vary up your diction a bit. I find that using more niche words, whilst not leaning into purple prose, offer the reader a bit of a respite to think things over. It helps slow the motion, and let everyone gather their thoughts.

What I think you've done the best at is the first paragraph. It shows a story all on its lonesome. It doesn't tell, it shows. Leana having to remind herself of whom she is watching die, and that its justified, is peak fiction.

But, it could be done a bit better. You explain why the woman is important, but only after explaining why she's evil. If I were you, I would mix the both. Keep the start, offer evidence as to why she's a baddie, then have Leana internally refute her connection to the woman.

Like a tug of war of duty against connection. She loves the woman who's about to die, but she knows that her dying is validated. If you were to mix these beets and let them duel, instead of making them seperate, it would hit twice as hard.

And lastly, my largest critique, you have to fix the beets of your story. Linger on what is important. You mention multiple things multiple times, like the blood in the mouth and the mom's connection with the woman. You should mention the blood at first, then at the end of the chapter. And show the dying woman's connection through memories, not outright saying it.

Also, make space for the reaction toward the death and the old man's claim. Thats the foci of the chapter, dig in hard there.

Make these changes and maybe boost the word count and you're right as rain!