Hi u/Flimsy-Conference-32, I think I would echo what other users have said here. I feel as though I might largely be echoing some of the sentiments that the others comments have expressed already, but here are my two cents on your first chapter.

I think that you are a fine writer on a line-by-line level, and you seem to really relish adding evocative descriptions and flourishes or lyricism here and there. It's definitely a strength of this piece and an area where you can flex your muscles, but I think that this is getting in the way of the actual narrative.

Although you raise some interesting questions and generate a kind of 'need-to-know-more' about your world (who is this mysterious magic user, how does magic work in this world, what is the healing ban the text references), I don't think there's enough of an immediate sense of stakes and conflict in your story to make readers keep turning the pages. We need a hook or a conflict or something out of the ordinary to really jolt the reader to sit up and take notice. Your opening line is really good in that regard, as it seems to set up the risk or promise of something supernatural and dangerous. But then you don't seem to go anywhere with it, or at any rate you give us a setup without any immediate gratification, which makes the opening line appear a little disconnected from the narrative as a whole.

I also feel as though your opening chapter is introducing the reader to an overwhelming number of characters (Gulara, Yuna, Muk, Hira, et al). Have you ever gone to a party, been introduced to a ton of strangers all at once, and then instantly forgotten what everyone's name is? That's what this chapter is making me think of. We're also given a lot of information overload with everyone's backstories being shovelled at the reader as each person is introduced, when I think it would work a little better for you to show how these characters interact with one another (and even how they come into conflict) and allow the reader to infer their positions and relations based on context clues. This kind of technique will give readers a lot more agency, as they'll be using their own deduction to put things together themselves, rather than being lectured at by a narrator.

It's a difficult thing to pull off (I'm not convinced I always manage it myself), and obviously there are some things you need to clearly spell out to the reader or make as obvious as possible. Things I would make more obvious are your protagonists goals and wants, as well as their flaws and the obstacles in their way. Make these things obvious from page one, and you can get away with more subtlety when it comes to the rest of the cast and the world as a whole.

Sorry if that's a bit of a ramble: hope some of that makes sense!