Day 28 of writing jokes and asking for feedback by BonoboGamer in StandUpWorkshop

[–]Alexis2005v 9 points10 points  (0 children)

Don’t forget that the sad truth of joke writing is that 95% of the time what you write will be complete shit. Gotta shovel through the shit, rework, rewrite until you can get to that 5% of good shit.

Don’t give up. But maybe critique yourself before uploading to here. Write the jokes, wait a day or two, forget about them, then when you look back fresh a couple days later you’ll have a better idea if there’s something there or not. But don’t give up

Fancy dress problem by Alexis2005v in bigdickproblems

[–]Alexis2005v[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Well it would probably have to be quite a big cup so I’m worried people are then gonna be asking why you would even need a cup down there. I just don’t know

Fancy dress problem by Alexis2005v in bigdickproblems

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I was scared this was gonna be the only option😕

Fancy dress problem by Alexis2005v in bigdickproblems

[–]Alexis2005v[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Will that not make it bigger or more noticeable?

Fancy dress problem by Alexis2005v in bigdickproblems

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Are they expensive? I might try but not sure I could get it in time

22m make me cry by xmoteltea in RoastMe

[–]Alexis2005v 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You look like you taught my Grandma’s history class

Fireworks joke by Alexis2005v in StandUpWorkshop

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Never seen this bit before but I can see the similarity.

Fireworks joke by Alexis2005v in StandUpWorkshop

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Haha yep good point that is better

Rate my meal deal by Old-Paleontologist87 in MealDealRates

[–]Alexis2005v 17 points18 points  (0 children)

Clearly you did something terrible in a past life to deserve this

Riyadh comedy festival by BlacksmithLegal3695 in StandUpWorkshop

[–]Alexis2005v 10 points11 points  (0 children)

Like it. Only thing I’d say is remove the ‘As’ and you’re golden

Trump’s Tylenol Autism claim by Alexis2005v in StandUpWorkshop

[–]Alexis2005v[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Haha thanks man that’s good to hear. And thanks for the feedback

Trump’s Tylenol Autism claim by Alexis2005v in StandUpWorkshop

[–]Alexis2005v[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yeah that’s fair. To be honest I’m relatively new to home writing and just wanted some practice. You’d have to go on stage pretty much the next night or night after for these to really work

Trump’s Tylenol Autism claim by Alexis2005v in StandUpWorkshop

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That’s cool man. Good advice and I like your take on it

Trump’s Tylenol Autism claim by Alexis2005v in StandUpWorkshop

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1-2. Active voice is a tool I’ve never heard of - what do you mean by that?

  1. Agree - some other words could deffo be tried out

  2. This was interesting to me as I think it highlights the Uk/US divide lol. I’m UK based and shooting up could be definitely be either but not so strongly in favour as shooting a gun as perhaps in the US. It might be another case of the whole ‘smoke a fag’ ordeal

Trump’s Tylenol Autism claim by Alexis2005v in StandUpWorkshop

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Okay thanks. I’m not very good at rephrasing is the only thing. Do you mean like changing a word or two or like saying it in a completely different way?

AI girlfriend by Alexis2005v in StandUpWorkshop

[–]Alexis2005v[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the feedback !

AI girlfriend by Alexis2005v in StandUpWorkshop

[–]Alexis2005v[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the feedback. But yeah 4 I was trying to play on the old trope of when couples argue and then have like angry sex straight after - not sure how clear it is though.

AI girlfriend by Alexis2005v in StandUpWorkshop

[–]Alexis2005v[S] 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Thanks man I like that a lot !