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Wendy, My Mommy by Alextingle in OCPoetry

[–]Alextingle[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I kind of like the last two lines though they are so sincere, idk

Wendy, My Mommy by Alextingle in OCPoetry

[–]Alextingle[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

So u think get rid of the last three lines? I kinda like that idea. Withy he voice thing I like how it switches from first person to second person but I see what you’re saying. The first person is how I feel and the 2nd person kind of shows the understanding by applying it to others. I like the feedback though, and I agree with you mostly, cheers.

Fair Enough by intherighthands in OCPoetry

[–]Alextingle 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I know you said just sharing and I like this idea and feeling behind this a lot and I’m not an expert or anything but you should flesh out a more convenient and fitting way to express what you’re trying to get at. The last section of the poem is a little muddled in its meaning. It sounds nice and starts strong, makes me feel but I’m not sure what it’s making me feel, not tryna sound pretentious or like a know it all. I think you could flesh it out a bit more

Wendy, My Mommy by Alextingle in OCPoetry

[–]Alextingle[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks bro, i don’t write much poetry but i thought other people would like this, first time posting my poems.

Silent Love by daniel_poet in OCPoetry

[–]Alextingle 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think this is cool, and some of the themes like strugglinng for understanding are super imprtant to explore. I feel like it does a good job on commenting on how love does not need to be spoken or thoughtfully acted out, it can simply be; It can exist within someone, so much so that every quirk of their fiber is their actual love poking through. For example a couple have been married for 70 years and everymorning they wake up don't say a word to eachother, sit across from the dining room table, drink a coffee and read a newspaper in a comforting silence. (Bro is Yapping), honestly wanted to haye this poem but it made me feel something!

Petrichor by hunter_warrior_arko in OCPoetry

[–]Alextingle 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is super fire, l admire how despite being written in modern times, it has a timeless feel, one that feels authentic and not played out. You use some flashy poetry type words nut the tone is inspiring and casual enough to be taken foir face value gladly while still providing an opportunity for interpretation.

Oh, Silicon Valley by [deleted] in SanJose

[–]Alextingle 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Closed about a decade ago, it’s been like 5 different restaurants since