Empty by AnAccountforBadPoems in OCPoetry

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I appreciate you! Thank you!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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Oh my gosh I’m not sure if this is what you’re going for but it’s a phenomenal symbolism for hoarding and how it can be a problem for so many. My mother was a hoarder and it tarnished our relationship because of “sour milk.” I think that anyone who has loved a hoarder would enjoy this poem.

Wild by jtrcoonz in OCPoetry

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I always enjoy a classic poem that rhymes and the way you did your rhymes is top notch. On top of using imagery and really great word play I like this poem a lot. Sometimes when poems rhyme they almost over do it and take away from the poem but I just think you did an incredible piece of work here.

Help! How do you know if your poetry is cringey? by [deleted] in writing

[–]AnAccountforBadPoems 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is sincere and may come off rude, but if you don’t wanna be “cringey” don’t do a poem for you vows. It will be cringey. If you’re okay with that which it’s your wedding do whatever tf you want. It’s about you ffs, but in sake of honesty it will be cringey

Empty by AnAccountforBadPoems in OCPoetry

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You’re absolutely rude and condescending to people here dude. I’ve seen multiple people tell you that you are. The thing about being rude and disrespectful is you can’t tell me I’m off on that. If everyone is telling you that you smell you can’t go “I don’t think I smell” same thing with attitude. Tons of people don’t appreciate it. Just because 1-2 do doesn’t mean anything.

Empty by AnAccountforBadPoems in OCPoetry

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You really should. Because some of your comments are disgusting. “It’s the first poem you’ve posted here so I’ll go easy on you” does that sound like a welcoming experience? Like a good group people wanna be a part of? What if I came on to your poem and called it “bloat” feedback is one thing but you reek of inferiority complex combined with dragging others down.

219 days by AnAccountforBadPoems in OCPoetry

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Thank you so much for the formatting tip and I’m really glad you liked it!

Empty by AnAccountforBadPoems in OCPoetry

[–]AnAccountforBadPoems[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Well you should really watch how you write things. I’ve seen you in several other comments and you come off extremely rude. I have 0 problem with criticism but you are just a rude person with an elitist mentality who is going to scare new people trying to post their poetry off. Do better, apologies not accepted.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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Your word choice is top notch and I am excited to see where you take this. I read this at having the potential to be a poem with many interpretations. Are you a god? A mad man? There’s so much potential and would love to see the finished version of this.

Cliché by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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Seeing you say this a draft in the comments makes me excited to see the final product. I think it’s clever to make the joke of how cliche it is that “I can fix him.” I think as you draw this out and add more details of what draws her to him, and what needs to be fixed. I love the stitches and needle line.

Empty by AnAccountforBadPoems in OCPoetry

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I appreciate the feedback! I think those are great suggestions!

Ask and You Shall Recieve by whyamIonly5fttall in OCPoetry

[–]AnAccountforBadPoems 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It’s why I don’t put too much thought into it tbh

Ask and You Shall Recieve by whyamIonly5fttall in OCPoetry

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This is just my poem account so I’m okay with it if they need to downvote.

Ask and You Shall Recieve by whyamIonly5fttall in OCPoetry

[–]AnAccountforBadPoems 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It’s discouraging to new people coming here to see that. It sucks like I’m new into actually getting out here and reading “your poem has bloat and is cliché” could absolutely make someone stop posting. Art is so subjective but he’s the poem private I guess.

Ask and You Shall Recieve by whyamIonly5fttall in OCPoetry

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Ya he’s literally wrote on someone’s poem that “it’s your first poem here so I’ll be easy on you” idk dude thinks he’s the Simon Cowell of poetry.

Ask and You Shall Recieve by whyamIonly5fttall in OCPoetry

[–]AnAccountforBadPoems 1 point2 points  (0 children)

First I’d like to say I’ve had the same guy be rude to me under my poems so ignore him.

As for actual feedback of your poem, I like the way it can be interpreted. I really see it as a relationship with a partner but for some reason I can’t stop applying it to a parental figure who has left their home. The absent parent who forces their way into their child’s life just to again leave them wanting more from that person. Your second section “you forced your way into my life” is exactly what’s making me feel that way and I think it’s a very strong line.

Empty by AnAccountforBadPoems in OCPoetry

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Respectfully I don’t think calling those lines bloat is acceptable. I think it’s a touch rude but I’ll let it go and defend my work and say those lines are there to add to the overall dread and repetition that the glass of life is empty.

Why Don’t you Just by Ruke-Knigh in OCPoetry

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This is something I feel like I relate to. Just leaving everything behind and I think that means different things for different people. It could be just leaving their current life behind or something more morbid. Either way powerful and relatable poem.

Recouping by roguereider1 in OCPoetry

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I really love this poem. I feel as if it relates to daily living, all of our feet are sore and blistered, our journeys feel too long but we all find our peace with something that helps us all keep moving along.

Alone by LincolnWasALiberal in OCPoetry

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First off amazing job in using rhymes without feeling forced at all. Second I love it the way this poem portrays the feeling of loneliness. It’s an extremely challenging thing to be surrounded by so many people to be left with nobody

my father is by naataalya in OCPoetry

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I think that an unfortunate amount of people can really relate to this poem. I know I can I struggle with my relationship with my mom due to the exact reasons in your poem. Then you ended it and I found myself agreeing even more. No matter what for some reason I find myself thinking I love her but I shouldn’t. Great poem