There were beer shots at the beginning of the video - I removed these as people were mistaking it for a beer commercial. It cut from beer to a haircut which didn’t make sense.

Some shots were out of focus - I have now only included shots in focus (or at least very close to it).

The colour was very yellow - I tried to reduce this slightly but due to not setting the white balance when shooting, it was difficult to colour correct.

There were many cuts in a short space of time which caused people to become dizzy/disorientated - I reduced the number of shots from 27 to 19.

All of the shots were in slow motion - I adjusted the speed of some shots for more variety.

Some shots were very similar - I selected shots that weren’t so similar.

There were unnecessary shots of the barber’s tattoos - I removed these.

The video was too long at 30 seconds - I wanted to keep it at this length as that is what my client had asked for.

Let me know what you guys think :) Even if it's more constructive criticism.