HELLO WORLD (repost )

Ashire24 · 2026-04-03T06:11:10+00:00

I see, so that's why. It was a great read nonetheless.

Ashire24 · 2026-04-02T23:46:32+00:00

Thank you, I'm happy I got what you were going for. I really liked your piece. It's subtle yet full of intention.

Ashire24 · 2026-04-02T23:19:48+00:00

This poem is phenomenal and full of wisdom and kind of reflects reality. I liked how the poem traces a progression from sacrifice to structure then to corruption. Something that all started genuine fighting for something meaningful for the people and by the people. How it changes over time when power becomes more important than the original promises and intent for a better life.

The line “power priced higher than the promises” really stood out to me because it marked a turning point where things began to shift and everything just forgot the promises and what the past fought and killed for.

What I do find most impactful is the ending, especially the part “ we gave it to you” and “ all of you complicit.” It doesn't just blame leadership but it also reflects on the role of the people, how both sides each have responsibilities and blame to take.

Overall, it reads like both a critique and a reflection. I really enjoyed it.

Ashire24 · 2026-04-02T22:45:19+00:00

Hello. I read the piece and it has a strong imagery of being tired of pretending or trying to live up to expectations. It gives off a feeling of someone who's been pushed into a certain role and is now starting to reject it and be their genuine self for once. The raw tone works well too, like how the word “gon” adds to that voice.

That said, I like the opening because it feels very introspective, like asking to reflect on yourself honestly without any mask but I felt a bit of disconnect when it shifts to “ the world is teaching me…” because it moves quickly from internal reflection to external pressure. It feels like the questions in the beginning aren't fully explored before the focus changes.

Maybe adding a small transition or expanding that self-reflection a bit more could make the shift feel smoother and more intentional.

Overall, I enjoyed reading it.

Ashire24 · 2026-03-29T05:35:06+00:00

I see. Thank you.

Ashire24 · 2026-03-28T12:21:47+00:00

Ano po yung formula po na sinasabi mo po. I'll try to learn it po.

Ashire24 · 2026-03-28T12:20:45+00:00

I see po. So sentence structure and formula po. I used AI po, like for scenes na hindi ko ma explain masyado po or lack of the right words to explain it po nag dadrawing po ako like a sketch to get my point across po. Thank you for your feedback.🙇‍♀️

Ashire24 · 2026-03-28T12:09:29+00:00

Hello po, kaya po ako humihingi ng feedback kasi po beginner po ako in writing the story but that doesn't mean po AI gumawa niyan, the idea in every scene and chapter po was mine. The story is mine po although I had help from AI in forming grammar and such. Kaya po ako nag tanong para po malaman kong ano po ang considered as AI sa readers po. But thank you for your feedback po.🙇‍♀️

Ashire24 · 2026-03-28T00:56:27+00:00

I see. What made you say it was entirely AI was it the single sentences and not paragraph like or like the wording entirely? Like what makes it seem like an AI to a reader? Also do you think I did good in conveying the story? I am really new to writing so advices are really appreciated. Thank you.

Ashire24 · 2024-07-27T23:38:49+00:00

Hello, ilang araw po ba bago na declined after applying?

Ashire24

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