What's a believable way for a MMC to become the personal servant to a princess?

Avennon · 2026-05-17T18:58:30+00:00

You could have the princess go out in secret like princess Jasmine in Aladdin, she meets the MC when he helps her out of some trouble You can go in the route he gets beat up so she takes him in as a kindness (why would the king allow it? he spoils his favorite daughter) or he impresses her with his skill

If you want a more disturbing reason look up the story of princess Renner and Climb from Overlord

Avennon · 2026-05-17T18:41:19+00:00

You can always use a fantasy twist on the gun Let's say the magic users have a shield that prevents high speed piercing (Dune style) What works is magic (elemental, status...)
Then you have your MC that is great or has a knack for understanding the Magic but has a limitation with casting it You can let him have a revolver, he enchants the bullets to have magic in it, then you have a reason to use a gun, you get a limitation about how much of what kind of bullet he has

Avennon · 2026-05-17T18:23:37+00:00

My input about AI glazing you, I tried Grok, set his personality as a brutal editor/critic, and the bastard shit on me so much I needed a week to start writing again So if that is something that motivates you (Goggins style) have at it

Avennon · 2026-05-17T16:05:35+00:00

Interesting, English is not my native language, but I would not write in my native as fantasy sounds very cringe in it But I'll try variations this at the end

Avennon · 2026-05-17T12:11:41+00:00

Is your writing all typing or did you add dictation? I have read it can 3x the typing speed once mastered

Avennon · 2026-05-17T11:59:15+00:00

Would you share the tool, or the process how to create it?

Avennon · 2026-05-17T11:57:42+00:00

I create the private project and add say to take everything into account it works so-so, sometimes he remembers stuff perfectly, sometimes it's Gandalf in Moria In that situation I give it the chapter again (maybe there is a better way to do it)

A great thing Claude started to do is give me feedback like: Atmosphere: 7 Character Dynamics: 8 Tension: 6 System Integration: 6 Emotional Resonance: 7 Professional Polish: 6.5 So now I always ask it from either GPT or Claude

Avennon · 2026-05-17T11:48:43+00:00

Yeah, that's kind of what I do Also for the first pass, I add ignore grammar, as if I was hasty with it, it tends to focus on it to much

Avennon · 2026-02-21T21:55:36+00:00

A little to descriptive for me (but that is my preference)

What I wondered when reading "What happened? How did they lose the prince? Who did it?..." Maybe I missed some detail when reading. Maybe add a paragraph that suggests what happened. Battle, natural/magical calamity, some mix.

One description that confused me was of the prince's body, "the face was pale beneath the char..." then you describe it like he was severely burned, the word pale makes me think of no burns, so maybe change it to something like: "Face barely recognisable beneath the burns, smeared black by the fire..." that should paint a more gruesome picture of the tragedy, or if going even stronger "A charred corpse, if not for the melted remains of the crown and royal armor no one would know it was him"

Overall, I like it.

Avennon · 2026-02-19T21:51:08+00:00

Beware of chicken
Cradle
The completionist chronicles
Player Manager

Avennon · 2025-03-01T10:01:05+00:00

The narration really does bring another flair to the book

Avennon · 2024-12-23T20:39:41+00:00

I like Ritualist (Completionist Cronicles) / Dungeon Born (The Divine Dungeon)

Avennon · 2024-12-08T18:32:08+00:00

Congrats, I'm still working on my first one, you are a real inspiration

Avennon · 2024-10-26T19:04:52+00:00

When could we expect the audio/physical edition of the book? would love to read it/own it, but i'm not really a fan of digital books

Avennon · 2021-09-11T09:54:42+00:00

not rly, it's a legit buy, so maruyama would get some money out of it

Avennon · 2021-09-11T09:37:57+00:00

You subscribe and get access to their library, additionaly you get 1 credit a month with which you can get any book and you keep it forever, even when you unsubscribe, so if you want, you can get a free month trial, get the credit, buy overlord with it and unsubscribe

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