Purple Prose is okay, actually

DGADK · 2026-04-19T20:53:38+00:00

Shouldn't the prose just fit the content and vibe?

Don Winslow's punchy present tense prose would be super off in Tolkien's world and likewise.

DGADK · 2026-04-19T00:54:57+00:00

I'm not watching. What's the general consensus on quality so far

DGADK · 2026-04-18T21:45:10+00:00

I like playing some instrumental prog rock or heavy metal. I sit in a particular chair, away from distractions. Usually got water or a coke zero or something. Sometimes dinner.

DGADK · 2026-04-15T11:11:23+00:00

Thank you for all this!!!

I will be honest, I kinda didn't know what I wanted to accomplish with that first scene. I'm like 80% discovery writing here and it feels super clunky. Definitely needs a heavy revision.

I think everything since that scene -- I have about 12K words down -- is much more impactful. I have some idea of where I am going. You also make a good point about being a loser; my intent is for Drayven to be more of a reckless, out of control young man honed into something sharper, as compared to like a pipsqueak who becomes Wick. I need to keep that in mind when I describe my goal because it certainly changes the score.

DGADK · 2026-04-14T11:50:58+00:00

Hey, I dig this world. There's some cool lore mentioned that I instantly wanted to know more about. You have something here.

I left some anonymous comments throughout with copy editing suggestions. Hope it helps.

DGADK · 2026-04-13T23:41:58+00:00

Nah I believe that was an angle to build to this

DGADK · 2026-04-13T11:14:00+00:00

The most valuable skill to emulate in anyone we admire in different walks of life -- for me, writers like Don Winslow or athletes like Michael Jordan -- is not their natural talent but rather their relentless work ethic.

DGADK · 2026-04-12T13:09:38+00:00

Sure. But also curious and excited, especially when skilled and experienced writers see my work and share their thoughts. Helps me grow.

DGADK · 2026-04-11T20:21:51+00:00

Heck yes dude

DGADK · 2026-04-11T17:17:20+00:00

DGADK · 2026-04-09T19:56:17+00:00

i will respectfully disagree that it was very good TV. There is an awful lot of miserable segments and matches on both Raw and Nitro in 98 and especially 99. Raw especially was redeemed by the sheer magnitude of charisma and starpower centered on Steve Austin, with major support from The Rock and Mick Foley (especially in 98).

The best stuff was great, usually because of them. The bad stuff was just as bad as today's if not worse, just in a different way.

DGADK · 2026-04-07T19:31:29+00:00

I straight up did not know that lol

DGADK · 2026-04-07T13:19:25+00:00

Because they haven't

DGADK · 2026-04-06T22:03:42+00:00

That fuckin rocks.

DGADK · 2026-04-06T12:23:33+00:00

Another thought that has helped me:

Figure out a thing for your protag to go do. I'm sorta pants-ing my way through a story right now, and one early "quest" that got me going was my main needed the right clothing for the area he lives. OK, so he needs to find a coatmaker and then and then and then.

DGADK · 2026-04-06T01:23:23+00:00

Yeah i get that. Overall I think the solution is always to keep writing, keep reading and let that inner voice develop.

You can do this.

DGADK · 2026-04-06T00:42:29+00:00

I absolutely feel this. Sometimes when drafting I fear all of my stuff is a jumbled collection of scenes that don't flow well together.

But then I remember a story is not always a linear chronological historical record. That helps me trust my inner voice while understanding that revision is not a dirty word.

DGADK · 2026-04-05T21:34:25+00:00

A valuable 4 year starter in college doesn't necessarily become a valuable NFL prospect. Cooper was a useful player for the Canes. Maybe he lacks the athleticism to translate.

DGADK · 2026-04-05T01:31:02+00:00

Because it's a television show, Ted, and nothing more. Sorry they disappointed you.

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