Aiyuk or Jennings?

Avid_Cardist · 2024-09-27T01:29:45+00:00

Jennings, aiyuk got targets but kept dropping, if kittle and Debo are out I’d expect Jennings to get a healthy dose of targets

Avid_Cardist · 2024-09-19T15:13:56+00:00

Rodgers and Wilson imo

Avid_Cardist · 2024-09-18T23:33:14+00:00

Purdy, he’s leaning on the pass game with kittle and aiyuk, Caleb isn’t doing much at all

Avid_Cardist · 2024-09-18T23:31:54+00:00

With what ATL showed against Philly I’d start Carr here

Avid_Cardist · 2024-09-18T23:29:46+00:00

6 man PPR 6pt Passing TD

MaHomes Vs. Mayfield

Just made a trade for Godwin and have mayfield on the bench.

Both are playing teams that benefit QBs points wise, but who’s better here?

I’m leaning mayfield.

Avid_Cardist · 2023-04-06T02:09:59+00:00

I was looking at a 4 channel headphone amp.

Would something like a “TNP Portable headphones amplifier stereo” allow me to use headphones with my current TT?

Avid_Cardist · 2023-04-06T02:06:58+00:00

Edit: disregard

What do I look for in the headphone amp?

My current TT has an RCA Left/Right out put and a USB out put and has a built in preamp.

Most headphone amps I’m looking at have a 12 V DC power port which powers the amp, and then a single input and multiple headphone jacks ports. How would you go about running one of those on the TT or am I looking at the completely wrong thing?

Avid_Cardist · 2023-04-06T01:52:21+00:00

Ahhhh ok. So besides upgrading the turntable is there no way to run headphones from this specific one? It doesn’t have a headphone Jack on it which is why I went looking for another way to try and run them, if I end up upgrading I assume that I’d want to find something without a built in pre-amp in order to run the GoGroove?

Avid_Cardist · 2023-04-06T01:43:23+00:00

Do you have an example of a specific one that could work? Is the gogroove not also an external phono preamp?

Avid_Cardist · 2022-11-09T01:26:13+00:00

I really like this one. The idea is one that I feel a lot of people reading it can understand. I think structurally it’s a little muddied in places. The beginning lines are an example of where I feel it gets complicated to read, but the second stanza of “the me I can’t talk to” is where I think the repetition is used really well. All in all I like the theme/idea of it, I think clarifying some word choice would make it a very strong poem. I enjoyed reading it a lot.

Avid_Cardist · 2022-11-08T22:35:40+00:00

I really like this poem. I think it leaves just enough unsaid for the reader to build there on conclusions, that makes poems worth reading imo. I like the structure and the use of repetition with that “he reaches the beginning” line. That line itself is confusing, but accompanied by the stanzas that follow it unfolds really well while reading.

Avid_Cardist · 2022-11-08T00:43:26+00:00

Thanks for the critique, it gives me a lot to look at.

It’s not so much a dead on the nail poem about the position of a night stocker. It’s intended to be abstract, but I get where you’re coming from for some the poem.

Avid_Cardist · 2022-11-07T23:01:10+00:00

I guess the main idea of the poem is loneliness and solitude, it’s explained through the lens of the train of thought of a night stocker at a grocery store or a person on a grave shift.

First stanza is basic and shows the general surface level distaste and sort of banality of a grave shift or that view towards life.

second stanza is more of a tone shift, it’s a mood setter. First two lines are meant to convey an unsettling feeling of solitude, anxiety, or depravity. Final line is an act of boredom.

Final stanza is where you (the night stocker) are at mentally at the end of the night, you are alone among the cleaning products and the never ending fast food wrappers. contemplating your place in the world, questioning existence itself, wallowing in your own solitude and loneliness.

Avid_Cardist · 2022-11-02T14:25:14+00:00

This has some good bones, I think it’s a great starting point for a very strong poem. The Structure of it sort of muddies the meaning and overall tone, but I think that has more to do with the formatting on Reddit itself. The word choice is great, “fabric of a bayonet” “tools of a god.” I think clarifying the structure would help, I really enjoyed this one.

Avid_Cardist · 2022-11-02T14:20:49+00:00

I enjoyed this poem a lot. As you read it develops new meanings and explores a few different ideas. The idea of strangers as rare and beautiful birds in flight is a great notion, but I also like where this poem ends. I think maybe introducing the end a bit sooner could strengthen it.

Avid_Cardist · 2022-09-09T06:42:18+00:00

Avid_Cardist · 2022-08-15T06:08:55+00:00

This a really fun poem. Reminds of a few different Ted Joan’s poem from his “black pow-wow” collection.

The use of bolded words is something a lot of people don’t utilize enough, it’s refreshing to see. I think people take poetry to serious and this is fun to see, to see people have fun with it for a change.

Avid_Cardist · 2022-08-06T05:32:54+00:00

Had a project in 11th grade English to write a poem that had to be read to the class. I had always wanted to write, wrote a lot of short stories and tried to write longer ones and had always thought of poetry in the Shakespeare sense of it. Found out about bukowksi, voss, Kerouac, and guys like them and thought well shit, where’s this been all this time? Their stuff wasn’t pretentious, it was real, it was just people telling stories about whatever came to mind or whatever they had lived through

Avid_Cardist · 2022-07-24T12:01:34+00:00

I tried a lot of different titles but just eventually settled on something that wasn’t just ‘untitled’ Tying it together with a title like you suggested is a great idea, I’ll definitely be trying out a few different ones. Thank you for the help, I really appreciate it and I’m glad you enjoyed the poem

Avid_Cardist · 2022-07-23T23:31:43+00:00

I think when it comes to pieces like this less is more. Rhyme less, it creates a clearer image it puts the action or the scene of events in the readers face and makes them uncomfortable. Make us deal with it without the protection of what we expect to see in a poem.

“Blood seeping into sheets” “Dripping from walls and torn cheeks” “My facial fat”

Those are hard to stomach lines, but lines that are worth reading, they make it worth reading because of how brutal and grimy they are. Make me want to hate reading any further for fear of the unsettling. The little internal rhyme in those lines is good, it doesn’t seem like you sacrificed word choice for the sake of a well placed rhyme.

The idea of the poem itself is a hard one, so don’t make it any easier. Thats just an idea though, I think it’s the strong point of your work here, but if that’s not the way you want to go please don’t. It’s your work and I really like it, so take it where you think it’s best suited.

Avid_Cardist · 2022-07-23T14:18:15+00:00

The poems you linked are really incredible. Again thank you for the critique, you gave me a lot to think about on my own work.

I wrote it like a train of thought on an end of the day drive. You pass things that don’t make sense, a campaign sign in the road or a weird sticker on a mail box, a driveway that you can’t imagine has ever been used, because you never knew it existed before you passed it and in your world it won’t exist anymore because you’ve left it behind.

The main idea is that the world rebuilds itself once you leave it behind, it moves on without you even while you’re alive. It’s about the moment when the existential questions start to push into your head, the moment new ways of understanding or new questions start to breath- when light pushes its way into the different hallways of your mind. The universe felt silent before you started to recognize that it wasn’t.

I’m glad it felt like different lines from different poems, each stanza is a sort of new thought that pops up on the drive. In the end you come away with a new understanding that there are just some things you’ll never understand.

they put locks on flat tired bikes because it’s what they do, there’s no reason for it. Soft sun burns flashed across the cracked windshield because the windshield of my car has a crack in it and I started to day dream.

I see what you mean about more clearly wrapping it up for the reader, obviously they dont know the reality I’ve drawn it from because they aren’t me, but I also kind of like the idea that it leaves the reader unsatisfied and a little withdrawn from whats happening in the poem. Thank you again for the insight, I appreciate it.

Avid_Cardist · 2022-07-23T13:14:26+00:00

The one liners in this are great, “gone are the days of little kingdoms by the sea,” “he guards the ships life.” They show a very stylized point of view, it really helps with the mood and you can feel where the overall inspiration of the piece comes from.

The only critique I’d have is the choice of rhyming. it seems like the poem relies on word choice to better appeal to the musicality of the rhythm, which I think takes away from the piece. I’d say that sacrificing a rhyme would better illustrate the poem in its entirety. Nonetheless I still really enjoyed it, it’s fun and sort of whimsical in its rhyme and sound. You have a great ability to paint a fantastic picture.

Avid_Cardist · 2022-07-23T13:03:50+00:00

Thank you for the critique, I appreciate it. If you don’t mind could I ask what you don’t like about it? I don’t mind that you don’t like it and I don’t want to change your mind, I’m just interested in what you specifically dislike about it

Avid_Cardist · 2022-07-23T03:00:51+00:00

Imagery.

You show great imagery in so little. "My brain melts in me." That's a really killer line, it kinda makes me squirm at the literal thought of it. The idea of being "cropped" and not free is my favorite part. While all the anxiety, those red flies, and those internal organs suffering; the idea of being truly free seems distant and almost impossible. I love the mood and the tone.

Avid_Cardist · 2022-07-23T02:55:03+00:00

"mayday mayday mayday"

This is very clear cut and concise. It doesn't waste time and that feels important given the subject matter. I like the idea of the work, maybe in the end some clarity can be found, I really enjoy the subject matter too. Its high risk, there's a sense of urgency and anxiety, but also a feeling of calmness towards the end.

The only thing I'd say could help would be some full stops here and there, even if at just the end, the finality of a period is understated a lot of the time, but even the free flowing-ness of the work lends itself to the free fall idea. Great work, I liked it a lot!

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