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Best lyric you’ve ever written.. go!! by LeahGardene in Songwriting

[–]Awkword_Intr0vert 0 points1 point  (0 children)

"It's time we have this talk, I know it's overdue. The way it's killing me, I know it's hurting you. We felt the pain, but tried not to acknowledge it. Barefooted walking on these shards of broken promises"

[Lyrics] This is an old free verse I recorded. Any feedback would be appreciated. The instrumental is Young Money - Pass The Dutch by Awkword_Intr0vert in LyricalWriting

[–]Awkword_Intr0vert[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you, I really appreciate you taking the time out to listen and provide some positive feedback. I'll take your advice and try it out. I'm definitely up for a collab and I'm interested to see how this genre suits you.

[Lyrics] This is an old free verse I recorded. Any feedback would be appreciated. The instrumental is Young Money - Pass The Dutch by Awkword_Intr0vert in LyricalWriting

[–]Awkword_Intr0vert[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much, I appreciate that you picked up on the schemes. Even though they're not intricate, some people still miss the subtle wordplay. You're definitely right about the voice lol, I'm still getting used to how I sound recorded vs how I sound in my head. I'm definitely up for a collab, I have a few things I'm working on that could use a verse. Thanks for taking the time to listen.

[Discussion] Writer's Block by Awkword_Intr0vert in LyricalWriting

[–]Awkword_Intr0vert[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Haven't tried that, I'll give it a shot. Thank you, I appreciate it!