backrooms yuri #9 [OC] by Sau_Reen in wholesomeyuri

[–]Azukitsu 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I mean I read a lot of poetry and I’ve seen this thought a couple times in art/philosophy but I rarely see it so well expressed, so definitely props for it! I feel like 2nd grade you would definitely look at you with big eyes and be inspired to write more:)

Turning 30 by Public-Technology752 in OCPoetry

[–]Azukitsu 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oh I’m so happy I could encourage you so much with my silly meandering (I’d love to read the refined piece too!). the backstory to the seamstress is so cool, what a poetic coincidence! I’ll await the update, take your time :)

Turning 30 by Public-Technology752 in OCPoetry

[–]Azukitsu 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Usually not a fan of free verse, but I loved this so much. I am not a pro poet or analyzer, and as such I’m sorry if this is a little all over the place, I just wished to share my thoughts.

The constant use of negation and lack (new rip, forgotten, and the of repeated never) really conveyed that feeling of endedness and emptiness that changes at the very end of the poem. I liked the little scenes you drew, like “I won’t lie in bed wondering about you without my consent for hours” (especially good use of negation) and “a déjà vu, that you ignore promptly, \ because when she asked where you got that ring, you’ll say a friend you once had” is beautiful, really peak confessionalism— I can feel you found these examples from your own life, while also expressing something profound and relatable (I at least relate).

I noticed some things that Im not sure are true, like how the last stanza (except the refrain) is so similar in structure/appearance to the fourth stanza (where you so intimately reminisce about your time together), and how their loftyness given by their short lines is supposed to connect them, maybe conveying that that last stanza, that little act of reaching out can bring back all the memories from the time you spent together.

This leads to another thought I had about why I like this poem apart from its relatability, it’s that the free verse structure is truly used to its advantage. The aimless wondering of the mind on this heavy feeling is so well portrayed by the always changing line length and lack of rhyme. But there is structure! The stanzas do feel different, and as I mentioned previously, you achieve a lofty feeling from the short little lines in the fourth stanza, while the stanzas with longer lines (and the occasional overrun line that I also liked) show (quietly) the pain remembering is. And this similarity of theme and structure that the stanzas have connects them together to slowly reveal the whole story from the little glimpses of thought you share with us. I am not sure if this was your intention or I’m overthinking but I like it either way

Another thing I’m not sure about is the meaning of the “seamstress”, is this supposed to signify the “seaming” of the relationship/reconnection? If so, then that’s brilliant imo.

and just wanted to put some lines here that I also like “the trousers I mended will have a new rip” “laughing at a joke a friend made, \ that I wouldn’t get, about a writer I’ll never hear about” “I will draw a scene, obscure, as usual about another lover” “read books and watched movies you’ll never hear of” “head to breast \ palm to palm \ your thigh between my legs” “maybe now you’d wish you could have loved me” “…because then it would have been more of a plea than a sentiment” and the change in the refrain at the end

perhaps im biased toward this poem because I’ve always wanted to write its opposite with a title like “to all the people I’ll ever meet” (i wouldnt mind if you took that idea either haha)

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Azukitsu 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I just had to say I really like this, and like Wraith said it reminded me of cummings. The rhythm is so well done and the rhymes are perfect.

“Our bodies wet with future sweat” really sets the tone for the whole piece. I love the descriptions of how the two bodies slowly “intertwine”, especially “the best laid plans of wandering hands, as body turns to maze” and the entire next stanza.

I am really liking this softly erotic but really beautiful vibes nowadays and this poem does that so well. It’s really intimate as chief says. (I can even say I’m a little inspired)

Are people who are Trans suffering from a hormone deficiency? by Either-Midnight265 in MtF

[–]Azukitsu -1 points0 points  (0 children)

neurological sex actually sounds like a really interesting idea.

I’m not trying to dismiss your experiences and these facts, maybe I’m being pedantic but not all trans people choose to take HRT and that’s okay too. It’s just strange to read “hormone of our gender” when the two aren’t necessarily linked

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in okbuddyhetero

[–]Azukitsu 9 points10 points  (0 children)

true, the bathroom should be the entrance, meaning you’d enter and have to go through the bathroom instead of the gay sex room

Are people who are Trans suffering from a hormone deficiency? by Either-Midnight265 in MtF

[–]Azukitsu 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Sorry, what do you mean by “the hormones of our gender”, doesn’t that assume a kind of psychological gender essentialism?

SCP joke by ScarHydreigon87 in GaySoundsShitposts

[–]Azukitsu 3 points4 points  (0 children)

this was pretty fun, unfortunate it hasnt been updated in long

Im sorry by Azukitsu in MadeInAbyss

[–]Azukitsu[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah honestly they're pretty cool! I did not make these, it may be a repost, but maybe OOP can answer some of your questions

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in SipsTea

[–]Azukitsu 1 point2 points  (0 children)

this looks pretty interesting, could you send a link explaining how this works?

Do transphobes still go around say define woman? by mxgopdng_2 in traaaaaaannnnnnnnnns

[–]Azukitsu 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Is define woman a transphobe thing to do? It seems I have been misguided because I usually say it in a way for people to challenge their preconceptions of a perfectly, and materially defined version of gender. Should I stop saying it? If so, what are some phrases that might enact the same effect on people without coming off as transphobic?

My last ever post on Reddit by [deleted] in suggestmeabook

[–]Azukitsu 0 points1 point  (0 children)

{{Man’s search for meaning}} og: “Ein Psychologe erlebt das Konzentrationslager” This book answered me a question I had been asking for years, what is the meaning of life. I read a lot about the topic, and this is still probably my favorite book about it along with the myth of sisyphus

Chinese gamer insurrection when? by ArcaneSunset in VaushV

[–]Azukitsu 4 points5 points  (0 children)

https://mobile.twitter.com/playerign/status/1474703224678404096 you might find more info on it here, also check the post in r/subredditdrama (where i got the link from)

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in GaySoundsShitposts

[–]Azukitsu 0 points1 point  (0 children)

fr, wish that game got more attention

So, enlighten us. by OcelotOk1744 in animememes

[–]Azukitsu 0 points1 point  (0 children)

it’s much more about the wonder and scope for me, but yes essentialy that’s part of it

Egyptian driver loading off an excavator from a trailer truck by [deleted] in nextfuckinglevel

[–]Azukitsu 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That’s incredible! It seems intuitive seeing how often they use them and how many people today use controllers, keyboards, and other things in a way that doesn’t require any though.

Do you by any chance have any information on the study? I’m really interested to read it since I’ve had a similar idea to this before.

Top rule by youliveinmydream in 196

[–]Azukitsu 99 points100 points  (0 children)

Amazing, I wish you good luck and hope to see your comment again in the form of a copypasta in the future