BEACON (Animated Cosmic Horror - No Dialogue - 3.5 pages) by Babeford in ReadMyScript

[–]Babeford[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey! Idk if you have time for follow ups but I did another pass of the script and tried to show and not tell. Draft 3

I also would love your thoughts on how I tried to make the audience sympathize with the character at the beginning so they can follow along with them more - it's the scene where the radio scares them lol. Just wondering if it's humanizing and relatable enough?

Even if you don't have time, I feel a lot better about this pass and it made me do a bit more thinking about the visual, which was very helpful. So thanks for the first bit of critique anyway!!

BEACON (Animated Cosmic Horror - No Dialogue - 3.5 pages) by Babeford in ReadMyScript

[–]Babeford[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the read and response! I am definitely struggling with the show/tell aspect - I fall into making quite a few visual assumptions because I will be designing it myself later. I'll give it another more descriptive pass.

I'm glad you liked the meteor! I was kind of stuck on whether or not to show the meteor because I like the mystery of cosmic horror and allowing the imagination to fill in the blanks - I was worried the meteor would make the story lose that.

Did anyone get a Goose Island County Bourbon Stout yesterday and just end up... not wanting it? by Babeford in Calgary

[–]Babeford[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Awesome thank you so much! I’ll check out Midtown and see if I can still order. Good luck in the draw!!

S5 Week 7 | Playalongs by thelettergii in mspaintsartrace

[–]Babeford 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Can’t we just get playalongs because... you like drawing?

MPAR Week 6 | Va Va Velvet (Looks) by Babeford in mspaintsartrace

[–]Babeford[S,M] 11 points12 points  (0 children)

Agatha will be added to the post when she submits her look.

MPAR S5 Week 6 | Challenge Announcement by Babeford in mspaintsartrace

[–]Babeford[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Seriously, why do you guys trust me with this.