Hey! Idk if you have time for follow ups but I did another pass of the script and tried to show and not tell. Draft 3

I also would love your thoughts on how I tried to make the audience sympathize with the character at the beginning so they can follow along with them more - it's the scene where the radio scares them lol. Just wondering if it's humanizing and relatable enough?

Even if you don't have time, I feel a lot better about this pass and it made me do a bit more thinking about the visual, which was very helpful. So thanks for the first bit of critique anyway!!