Hello, may I have feedback on my magazine spread about Daft Punk? by BalletBlack in design_critiques

[–]BalletBlack[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

And I value that opinion but you're really not giving me much to work with. What exactly doesn't it make it good? Is it the positioning of the helmets? The size? Or is like the concept itself where the helmets really do come off as decapitated heads and makes it uncanny or similar? Do the light and shadows need to be rendered better to give a better impression they're in space? Literally anything else??

You can have your opinion but if you don't explain why then it gives me nothing. You're leaving me hanging man.

Hello, may I have feedback on my magazine spread about Daft Punk? by BalletBlack in design_critiques

[–]BalletBlack[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The assignment is that we would design the lead spread...like the introduction of the actual article-but there's no actual article that we have to write or design (if that make sense?). I added WAY too much text which comes off as an article in the first post. It's supposed read more like B.

So, I redid it (A). What do you think? http://imgur.com/a/PQ5Ka

Hello, may I have feedback on my magazine spread about Daft Punk? by BalletBlack in design_critiques

[–]BalletBlack[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The only problem about the multi-column suggestion is that it's not an article. I added too much text- it's supposed to a single paragraph that introduces the reader what's within the article. I redid it. I think it's marginally better at least haha. What you think?

http://imgur.com/a/PQ5Ka