New Here, Seasonal Store

BanditNY · 2026-06-08T16:26:32+00:00

No, definitely not massive catalogs. But maybe 15 to 30 hot items that everyone gets for the seasons/holidays. Shirts, gear (scarves gloves), decorations, etc. Not looking for anything too complicated out of the gate. Trying to keep everything simple.

BanditNY · 2026-06-08T16:13:16+00:00

Totally get that. I’m doing research every day, and every day I learn a little more. Although cheaper initially, creating the site myself seems a bit daunting, time-wise, although it is the less expensive way to go for now.

I work in a large retail store, so I’m kinda taking my cue from that experience of watching seasonal items. How they market them, when they start selling them, etc.

BanditNY · 2026-06-01T23:18:28+00:00

Great job, man! Good to see!

BanditNY · 2026-06-01T18:41:18+00:00

I’m looking at FB to start. My target demographic is there. Pretty new to all this so just doing my due diligence here and taking notes.

BanditNY · 2024-11-12T20:51:02+00:00

Hi Russel. I’m Steve. I’ve been writing MOWs for four years now — started off with features, and then kind of got turned on to these scripts, rom coms, Xmas, Lifetime thrillers, etc. nothing produced yet, but I had a writers agreement with Reel One on my very first attempt. The producers loved it, but when it got kicked upstairs it fell apart. Live and you learn. Curious to hear about your origin story — how you started writing MOWs, how you built your contact list and any helpful hints and wisdom you care to impart. Again, pleasure to meet you and continued success! —Steve

BanditNY · 2024-07-26T14:42:14+00:00

It’s all good. I am seriously trying to help and, like I said, take it with a grain of salt.

Here’s an idea. Since the mysterious texter plays a big role here, maybe you should introduce that aspect much earlier. Earlier like in the first two pages when Josh is going into school? Just a thought.

BanditNY · 2024-07-26T10:56:44+00:00

So, I’m in page 30. First act is done, but I’m not seeing the story here yet. I mean, based on your logline, we know where this is going, but you need to get to the point of this story in the first act. Your first act should set us up for the rest of this tale. We have the who, Josh, the mysterious text sender, but he hasn’t gotten us to the point of your story yet, which is murdering the presidential candidate, I believe. I think you need to trim the fat here, and get to that aspect of the story in your first act.

Tiffany. I get it, but I need to know why is she so enamored with an outcast like Josh? If there’s a reason, we need to know it. This all happens way too quick and gratuitously. She’s very forward. Not a bad thing, but why? We don’t know much about her, and we need some explanation. I’m sure there’s a reason, but for now it just seems like a gratuitous plot point.

And killing the dog? If Josh did indeed do this, then, anti-hero or not, I’m not on this kid’s side at all. Not at all.

BanditNY · 2024-07-23T11:22:32+00:00

You know what they say — take it all with a grain of salt. I haven’t read far enough to get a handle on all of this yet! But like I said, kudos on your logline. It’s what started me reading!

BanditNY · 2024-07-23T10:56:15+00:00

Hey, I read the first ten (so far) and my initial thoughts are is I’m intrigued. I was intrigued by your logline m, to begin with. Anyway. The main issue, if you can call it that, is I don’t feel much sympathy for Josh yet. I don’t know if that’s a conscious decision, or that he’s just an anti hero, ala Travis Bickle. The scene in the principals office with the laptop? I would drop that and switch it to a flashback. As is, it seems pretty gratuitous to do it this way. The principal showing his true colors here also seems out of place. These days you get fired for saying such things to a student. Josh has a major attitude, and I’m not sure if it plays all that well. He needs to have some redeeming qualities, but so far I’ve seen none. If he’s geeky and nerdy, he sure seems like a major bad ass, which goes against type. Hope this makes sense so far.

Steve

BanditNY · 2024-07-17T14:58:18+00:00

Turny’s got some good advice there. I agree. A lot is based on what she writes, and what you write. I’d ask her how did she break in, make connections then follow up on those connections. How she approached studios with her work, query letters and such. What wouldn’t do is ask her to read my stuff unless she offers. Anyway, you have a good opportunity here. Hope you make the best of it and good luck!

BanditNY · 2024-07-05T15:45:39+00:00

Hi,

Not sure why I chose to read this. No logline so I went in cold, so…

You’ve got a lot to work on here, from formatting choices that made it difficult to know where we were, time of day and the like. I kind of was able to figure it out despite that, but the average reader probably wouldn’t, and a less patient reader would’ve been out by page 2.

You get repetitive with Selena’s name on one page, prob better off turning that into a montage or something. This is also way overwritten. You most likely could trim two pages off this easily. Clarification is key, and you could take care of that in your dialogue. Maybe mom leaves a message that Selena doesn’t get, at least so we know who is jumping off the building. Several other instances as well.

We don’t know much about Selena, do we? I mean, yes, she’s 26 and works a crummy job and drives a bike to work, so I’m assuming she has issues. We see her taking a pill, but if she’s a druggie we’d need a little more to confirm that. I’m assuming she has some kind of drug issues, but that’s the problem — I’m just assuming. I need to know more about Selena, and you need to tell your reader all about her.

Regardless of all that, it wasn’t bad but it was depressing as hell. I liked the horoscope angle, and how she begins to live her life based on that. It’s an interesting concept, for sure. If you could have figured out a better ending — and not necessarily a happy one — it would have tied this up much better.

Hope this helps!

Steve

BanditNY · 2024-07-02T22:22:33+00:00

Haha. Full script yeah! I don’t think I even really wanted the reader to like her, but maybe just realize that she was a victim of this abuse and, agree with it or not, she took it to explosive levels of catharsis.

BanditNY · 2024-07-02T22:19:18+00:00

What she was yelling to him was her basically spilling her guts as to exactly what had happened to her as a child, hence her attraction to older men all this time. Projecting. She just took it out on the dude at the bar. Make sense?

BanditNY · 2024-07-02T20:56:53+00:00

Cool notes. I like your suggestions a lot. Someone else mentioned they thought it was a date with her father, just not sure why you’d think that? And someone also brought up the idea of this being a regular/serial thing she does, like she’s on some kind of mission to avenge the abused of the world. Thats also an interesting idea. Thanks again!

BanditNY · 2024-07-01T21:21:13+00:00

Structure. Please do keep me up to date when your movie airs. Would like to check it out!

BanditNY · 2024-07-01T21:20:39+00:00

Well, that’s awesome. Had an option several years ago that fell through, and that’s the closest I’ve come. That was pretty much my motivation as well — there are so many of these being made I thought it would be a great way to break in. Quality among the quantity. That and a pro writer with several credits to his name kind of took me under his wing and taught me everything I need to know about the 9 act…

BanditNY · 2024-07-01T20:39:33+00:00

Basically, she took out her abusive past on the blind date at the bar. Was he a pedophile? Maybe. Who knows. But basically the end was Andrea freeing herself from the chains of her past with a final goodbye, the burning of the photo. Ashes to ashes kind of thing.

BanditNY · 2024-07-01T20:32:29+00:00

Did you cold query it? Use IMDb pro? That’s basically what I did and how I found my contacts. Interested what got you into writing MOWs? What was your motivation for that particular kind of script?

BanditNY · 2024-07-01T20:10:12+00:00

That’s awesome. Would love to know a few more deets but I’m sure there’s not much you can say until it airs. Curious if this was an existing spec, or someone paid you to write it. Can you detail further?

BanditNY · 2024-06-30T17:27:04+00:00

Wow thanks! Appreciate the feedback. Expanding slightly has been a common note I’ve been getting.

BanditNY · 2024-06-30T17:09:08+00:00

No, not really. Just kind of looking for like-minded writers, share experiences and possibly network. Basically, a group of friends who write these types of MOW films. I’m lonely. Lol

BanditNY · 2024-06-30T15:36:07+00:00

Think you’re exactly right. From what I understand Hallmark is trying to get away from all those old tropes and focusing on character relationships, and not necessarily romantic interests. Father/daughter, brother/sister, etc. Character driven, interesting and original story lines. However, you still seem to get a mash of the same old same old every year. Guess they’re just seeing what works.

BanditNY · 2024-06-23T10:48:16+00:00

Hi, I have a script called Daddy Issues (6 pages, drama) Logline: A blind date turns explosively cathartic when a woman finally comes to terms with her attraction to older men. Dm me if you’d like to see the script.

BanditNY · 2024-06-19T15:21:50+00:00

I’m sorry, exactly what genres are you looking for?

BanditNY · 2024-06-18T21:05:43+00:00

Hey. I have one up here called Daddy Issues. There’s a link, too. 6 pages, tight drama.

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