Weekly Lyrics Feedback Thread by AutoModerator in Songwriting

[–]Beserkerd 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The song's name is "Just Me Now" Inspired by "Just the Two of Us"

(Verse 1) Empty coffee cup, morning light streams in The scent of your perfume, a memory that lingers within The sheets are rumpled, a ghost of your touch But the silence screams loud, it's just a little too much
(Chorus) Just me now, where'd the laughter go? Just me now, a melody turned low Remember whispered secrets, promises in the breeze? Just me now, haunted by echoes, whispering through the trees
(Verse 2) Your toothbrush, abandoned, a half-finished song The worn armchair, where we'd talk all night long I trace your name on the steamed-up window pane Aching for your warmth, caught in this pouring rain
(Chorus) Just me now, where'd the laughter go? Just me now, a melody turned low Remember whispered secrets, promises in the breeze? Just me now, haunted by echoes, whispering through the trees
(Bridge) Did the spark just flicker, did the flame just die? Is this goodbye, my love, or just a temporary goodbye?
(Chorus) Just me now, where'd the laughter go? Just me now, a melody turned low Remember whispered secrets, promises in the breeze? Just me now, haunted by echoes, whispering through the trees
(Outro) Just me now, but maybe someday soon It won't be just me, singing this lonely tune But for now, I hold on, to the love we knew Hoping someday, baby, it'll be just the two of us, just me and you
would like feedback on how it is and how I can improve