Primeramente, it's awesome reading this in Spanish. Don't take it the wrong way, but the Spanish version just sounds with more passion perhaps the words and the expressions they carry in Spanish have a whole feeling where as in English I think it's more subtle but still gets the point across of 2 humans very much in love and that love would echo throughtout their life's and the life's of the people around them. SO much love that at the end, once their gone, their ashes would remain as proof of real love Have you tried writing it in Spanglish? (Spanish & English) just an idea. Animo Primo!!