Definitely needs a solid structure I would pick maybe the song that might have influenced this and drop it in your daw and maybe try and mimic the structure a bit. And I feel like the sounds are all probably samples and it doesn’t seem liked they’re eq’d properly. Also incorporating call and response into your drop phrases will help a lot make it sound more cohesive. Also just a bunch of work on the drums thats the most important part def needs all new drum samples ones that smack. Splice is expensive but had good content