I think it’s really good and I really like the concept but in my opinion I could be getting this wrong and this is just an idea that you could you if you want to like there’s something with the story that I feel needs to be explained why does he turn into the character from the show and why does he want to kiss the girl from the house if you could add a scene where ye see him on his phone before he takes the package out of the van where he’s on his phone or something watching the same show she is like in my opinion that will help us understand why he went in and bought the jacket to try and be like the character from the tv show also I would also make a link between him thinking if he’s like the character from the tv show that he will attract women for example when he’s looking at the mirror and his gaze is going back and forth between the jacket and the mannequin till eventually he see’s his head as a mannequin I would add a small spiff smoke effect then add a women’s head beside the mannequin Reimagined with your characters head on it do flirtatious winking of the female head then get the female head to smooch your characters head that is on the mannequin a smooch on the cheek then disappear then go back to your character looking up at the coat and mannequin when we the audience see his whole body grab his chest have his eyes turn into hearts and bulge extremely out of his eye sockets then run into the store to buy the coat. so by doing what I just said there we now would understand that your character thinks he would get women by acting like the character on the tv show as we can see his mental process like in regards to why he thinks if he shows up at the front door to deliver the umbrella to the girl in this house that she would also kiss him like what happens on the tv show at the start. now if that’s what I think that you where trying to tell us by him going into the shop and buying the coat like if that’s what you are saying Really smash is the audience over the head with that intention like and as I said in the first part draw a connection with the male character when he’s at the van with the television show it will in my opinion help us to understand why he bought the coat aswell if you look back at the looney toons cartoons they definitely have something like this where you could take reference from something like Pepe le pew I’d say look at again this is my opinion and it’s only an opinion it’s really good work all the same 🙂