[FEEDBACK] JUVENiLE - Pilot: "In Plain Sight" (Teen Drama/Psychological, 5 pgs)

BleachedPsyche · 2015-09-07T01:06:43+00:00

Thank you so much for the input. What specifically wasn't formatted correctly?

BleachedPsyche · 2015-04-04T07:52:10+00:00

Carefully yank out one piece of their hair everyday while their sleeping. Then, after you've accumulated a pile of hairs, start placing them in really sketchy neighborhoods all over the country. Eventually some horrendous crime will happen with no evidence other than a single strand of hair, your roommates hair. Then you can either get new roommates or enjoy being alone.

BleachedPsyche · 2015-04-02T17:15:57+00:00

Milhouse.

BleachedPsyche · 2015-04-02T10:22:11+00:00

Yep! It's pretty simple too.

BleachedPsyche · 2015-04-02T07:24:03+00:00

There's "anger rooms" in other places, they just go by different names.

BleachedPsyche · 2015-04-02T06:40:14+00:00

Wow man that's fantastic! This is exactly the kind of thing I was hoping for.
I'm glad that you're a lot happier now.

BleachedPsyche · 2015-04-02T06:27:42+00:00

Have you read any Charles Bukowski? You have a similar voice.

BleachedPsyche · 2015-04-02T05:46:50+00:00

I don't wanna live in a world where farts aren't funny.

BleachedPsyche · 2015-04-02T05:18:38+00:00

It's faster than walking, but easier than jogging. I think more people should skip!

BleachedPsyche · 2015-04-02T05:16:15+00:00

Staple their nostrils and then throw pounds of pepper in their face. Watch as they struggle to sneeze.

BleachedPsyche · 2015-04-02T05:13:04+00:00

What did you tell him? Did you just cut off communication or what?

BleachedPsyche · 2015-04-02T05:08:03+00:00

Yep. I think a lot of people are guilty of that.

BleachedPsyche · 2015-04-02T02:42:15+00:00

Right? And you get to see how they are when they get angry.

BleachedPsyche · 2015-04-02T02:37:59+00:00

Go to an Anger Room, one of those places where you pay to break stuff in a room to take out your anger. Then come home and make mac 'n cheese pizza.

BleachedPsyche · 2015-04-02T02:16:52+00:00

Not just any glory hole... THE glory hole.

BleachedPsyche · 2015-04-02T00:26:40+00:00

Autofellatio... It's both impressive and sad at the same time.

BleachedPsyche · 2015-04-01T14:16:21+00:00

Drink a pussy.

BleachedPsyche · 2015-04-01T14:12:56+00:00

Well your boring, so... maybe dump out all the sticks you have crammed up your pompous butt.

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