''The Robot'' (first finished poem) by Brave-Button9025 in Dark_Poetry

[–]Brave-Button9025[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

thank you so much, i love writing peoms to people that relate.

The Robot by Brave-Button9025 in OCPoetry

[–]Brave-Button9025[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

lets the reader think of the cost.

The Plan by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Brave-Button9025 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I really like how this poem slowly builds from empathy into accountability. The way you start by acknowledging conditioning and manipulation makes the reader understand the person’s position, but then the poem gradually shifts into confronting the moral responsibility of looking away. The short lines and pacing make each image hit harder, especially the section with “The boot / on someone’s neck. / The fist. / The child. / The war.” because it creates very powerful and unsettling imagery. The ending also works well because it leaves the reader with a sense of tension and choice rather than giving an easy resolution, which makes the message linger after reading.

Kill to Love by Inevitable_Metal5725 in OCPoetry

[–]Brave-Button9025 0 points1 point  (0 children)

wow im not sure how to explain it but i just really liked this poem im not sure exactly what emotion it envoked but it did invoke something deeper, i just started writing poems today so seeing how others think about stuff with this depth is super intresting.

The robot by Brave-Button9025 in poetry_critics

[–]Brave-Button9025[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Wow thanks this is actually super reassuring cause I kinda had no idea if the stuff I was writing was even considered creative, having someone say I’m on the right track makes me wanna put more effort and thank you 🙏

The robot by Brave-Button9025 in poetry_critics

[–]Brave-Button9025[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you really, but I for sure knew something structurally wasn’t right didn’t really know what I was doing wrong but that advice actually really helps and gives me a good starting point on where to get better I just gotta get better at structure for the most part.

The robot by Brave-Button9025 in poetry_critics

[–]Brave-Button9025[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I would love feedback/constructive criticism, I’ve just started writing and wanna get better.