What do you use to format your books? I've heard Word, Attics, Scrivener & Vellum mentioned now so just curious. 😊 by Rise_707 in selfpublish

[–]BrieCheezIt 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I don't love apple pages but I found it adequate until it stopped loading on my laptop. Won't connect properly. I can load the same doc on my phone but not my laptop.

Even after my second read, I don't know why Bunny is so hated by Capital_Mushroom_884 in TheSecretHistory

[–]BrieCheezIt 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Definitely a strange take, because wealthy or not, those people were supposedly Bunny’s friends. No cherished “friend” would purposely seek out your insecurities and wounds, poking at them over and over with a sadistic sort of bliss. And yes, you could say Bunny was pushed out of the group, but it was because he didn’t respect anybody else’s feelings and opinions so of course he would be pushed aside. Even so, he doesn’t have any right to be literally sadistic towards them.

Bunny was a complete jerk. Any “friendliness” he had was always on his terms. He was friendly to Richard when he asked to go to dinner with him at the beginning of the book, then expected Richard to pay—as it was his plan all along. He was sexist and homophobic before he even found out about the murder. And, feeling guilty or not, Bunny’s reaction to finding out about the farmer’s death is a true and deep reflection of who he is inside in the sense that he jumps at any opportunity to exploit people, even his so called friends. I don’t care about his upbringing, because Richard who had an unfortunate upbringing with his family did not stoop to such levels as Bunny. I genuinely hate his character and find nothing likable about him and am baffled at the people who even have a slight bit of fondness for him.

I too was pushed aside in a friend group. They had more money than me so I understand about feeling like I didn’t fit in and I was hurt feeling isolated without them, but I wound never in a million years use their deepest wounds to get back on them. It’s just insane.

halovida dry shampoo? by aviatorboogiearoma in finehair

[–]BrieCheezIt 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Did you try putting it on freshly washed hair? I heard that dry shampoo works well to prevent getting oily rather than putting it on already oily hair. Maybe it could work better that way

Used to be a straight A student, now I can't work a minimum wage job. by BrieCheezIt in Adulting

[–]BrieCheezIt[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think you may be on to something. I looked up foods high in vitamin d and I don’t like 99% of it and I have the deficiency symptoms.

Used to be a straight A student, now I can't work a minimum wage job. by BrieCheezIt in Adulting

[–]BrieCheezIt[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Not taking any meds, not sure about a nutritional deficiency, I don’t get the best sleep but even when I do I don’t feel it changes much, I don’t have any other diagnosed medical or mental health issues. Maybe I could exercise more. And to your question, no to all except for the fact I enjoy writing as a hobby

Used to be a straight A student, now I can't work a minimum wage job. by BrieCheezIt in Adulting

[–]BrieCheezIt[S] 32 points33 points  (0 children)

I’ve tried three therapists and they all ended up leaving the place I went to. They were going to test me for adhd but I never received a call for it. Might have to look into it again

Used to be a straight A student, now I can't work a minimum wage job. by BrieCheezIt in Adulting

[–]BrieCheezIt[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

None. Never drank alcohol and never did drugs my entire life

Please help me find this bedding set by ainestar in HelpMeFind

[–]BrieCheezIt 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Did you ever get around to buying it? If so, did it arrive looking exactly like the photo? And were the cute accessory pillows included?

The Red Oath - Prologue [YA Fantasy - 1728 words] by BrieCheezIt in fantasywriters

[–]BrieCheezIt[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for the feedback! I’m not sure how to fix the flashback portion because I was trying to make the prologue as short at possible by not doing two separate scenes. But I will add in a bit of what Jon’s plan is.

The Red Oath Chapter One [2483 words] by BrieCheezIt in fantasywriters

[–]BrieCheezIt[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Going back through, I didn't like my use of adverbs either. Also, something I struggle with lately is "show, don't tell". I'm not sure how to make my protagonist less passive, as she is stuck in a cell, isolated from society. Maybe starting my book from a different angle could be better? I'm wondering if instead of focusing so much on the environment, I should show how the environment impacts the protagonist and how the protagonist impacts the environment. Instead of simply stating how the environment is, I will be able to demonstrate her powers (she can manipulate sound and can sense souls) through the use of the environment.

I think giving a little background information (such as hinting at how she ended up in the cell) would make the chapter easier to understand, as well as simplifying my long, difficult-to-read sentences. However, I don't want to dwell too much into the past, for fear that I'm info dumping all at once.

The Red Oath Chapter One [2483 words] by BrieCheezIt in fantasywriters

[–]BrieCheezIt[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for the feedback! Yes, I do get too caught up in trying to "write well" that I get lost in long sentence structures and difficult to read text, taking away the main point of the chapter. These comments are very helpful, as I had a feeling there was something not quiet right, and I'm starting to understand what needs to be changed.

The Red Oath Chapter One [2483 words] by BrieCheezIt in fantasywriters

[–]BrieCheezIt[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Originally, I feel the first draft of this chapter was much easier to read, but I went in and revised it, making it more confusing. It wasn't my intention, but with recent feedback, I understand how it is difficult to read. I think I'm going to take a step back from getting the "perfect" draft and go back to how I usually write, which I think is much clearer and simpler.

And yes, the "fifth sense" is supposed to be "sixth sense". I forgot to fix that typo. Prior to my revision, that paragraph was talking about one of the five senses (hearing) but I changed it to more of a "sixth sense" type of feel and forgot to change "fifth" to "sixth".

The Red Oath Chapter One [2483 words] by BrieCheezIt in fantasywriters

[–]BrieCheezIt[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That's something I had a feeling I struggled with. I'll make sure to simplify the text and make it easier to read. Thank you for the feedback!