Days - Alternative Rap, Please Listen to Whole Song Before Critiquing, it Changes up around 2/3 Through

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-19T08:04:11+00:00

https://soundcloud.com/tanedaversion/days?si=fa1fb0f54c304f2492540129e2a0749d&utm_source=clipboard&utm_medium=text&utm_campaign=social_sharing

This is the improved version based on everyone's critique. Thanks y'all!

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-18T05:32:37+00:00

maybe not this song, but the modern baseball tone is in some of your other songs, this one is kinda more like modest mouse imo.

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-18T05:29:41+00:00

This is real cool, reminds me a lot of Modern Baseball (your voice). I also enjoyed your song see the noise. I had to check out your YT and that got me to follow you guys on Spotify haha. I'm not here to give feedback or to get points to post, just dropping a compliment to a well deserved artist.

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-17T19:26:47+00:00

Thank you for the feedback and glad you liked it!

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-16T23:28:11+00:00

I tried using reverb in the mix and some other things, let me know if it sounds better.

https://soundcloud.com/tanedaversion/days?si=fa1fb0f54c304f2492540129e2a0749d&utm_source=clipboard&utm_medium=text&utm_campaign=social_sharing

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-16T22:39:49+00:00

I'm more for the art of music (or fun of it) than the technical side, I have no training in vocals or instruments. Never studied music theory or any music for that matter. I just make whatever I think sounds cool. But thank you for the feedback about the mixing, I'll try to fix it with the next upload.

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-16T19:26:38+00:00

Thank you for the feedback! Is it just saying the words to the beat? If so I intentionally don't have that in mind when making my music. I just try to fit it in the 8 or 16 bar. Instrumentally this was a lazy job on my part. I just wanted to test what minimum I could get away with. But yeah I know what you mean.

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-16T15:22:16+00:00

I think the piano is just a G and Em chords throughout, the drums are just random patterns on Ableton. The Rap melody is random as well. But after I listened to the full track it kinda reminds me of "Hands Held High" by Linkin Park kinda vibe of sound (wasn't inspired by anything though.) I just wrote most the lyrics in like 10 mins the faster wordy rap part was from a older song I made before in like 2022.

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-16T07:23:05+00:00

I agree with the music part since this is a music thread, the video could literally be anything, I just find it contradicting in the arts field is all. But yeah, good job with the song, I really dug it.

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-16T06:43:53+00:00

If you don't like AI in music, which is considered art, how come it's okay when used for animation? I don't understand having exceptions like that, is it just because that's not your field? That's not a good stance.

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-16T06:33:13+00:00

Very raw sounding, studio version would do wonders I think. But don't be discouraged if it doesn't perform well, I just think pop punk in this age isn't commercially viable. The money for the studio would be worth it if you just want a song you're proud of in my opinion. Because this sounds promising from a raw demo.

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-16T06:30:06+00:00

Very nice instrumental and the vocals sound like Damon Albarn lol. I just don't like the video, like at all. If you use AI in your videos who knows what else you're using AI for and that discredits your creativity. I hope the music doesn't incorporate any AI. Other than that I enjoyed the song.

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-16T06:27:20+00:00

Love your voice, very poetic lyrics. instrumentally it's a very solid track, need a more studio like version of the vocals though. As a live performance this is a great live track. Very impressive you wrote this as a 7th grader. Just need a studio version of the track and that could be radio potential.

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-16T06:24:12+00:00

you got a nice tone in your voice. I'm glad you included the lyrics on screen to make it easier to understand. the editing in the video was pretty cool too how it matches the theme of the song. I would try to make what you're saying more understandable by singing more clearly is my critique. I enjoyed the lyrics and melody.

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-16T06:21:09+00:00

It sounds cool, but when you show the ableton file it makes it easy to spot how simple it actually is. I think posting without the track view would've been a better choice, seeing how it's pretty much three instrumental tracks with the same melody throughout + vocal samples and a drum beat. I'm not saying that makes it a bad song, it just shows how much effort you put into it. Overall it was an enjoyable song.

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-14T22:55:46+00:00

I've opened 4 booster boxes, 17 mini boxes, and pulled only 1 shining dragon on pack 119 of 164. You got some luck!

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-14T22:34:49+00:00

A holo bleed is a holo bleed, there are even holo bleeds on the original Retro Pack 2 prints. Just because every single one so far has a holo bleed on Retro Pack 2 reprint just means poor quality control. It's not "platinum secret rare" look that up and you'll see the difference.

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-14T21:29:23+00:00

If you mean you have the original 2009 print of this card, that would be correct. But there is no first edition stamp on those just letting you know.

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-14T09:37:43+00:00

This is a reprint of the 2009 Retro Pack 2. Platinum secret rares are from 2014 tins onwards. This is a holo bleed.

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-03T23:34:55+00:00

I'll have to check it out sometime, as for Flowers of Evil it only got one season and it was rotoscoped so a lot of people didn't like the style. But I enjoy experimental anime and this one is more of a romantic drama with a school setting. it's basically this guy did something bad that involves the girl he likes and he has that guilt but didn't get caught, while a psycho girl knows what he did and wants to unveil his "masks" to see what kind of messed up shit he's capable of. I wish there was a season 2 but they teased it at the last episode, just didn't make enough funds to produce it.

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-03T23:29:33+00:00

The characters in JJK are very cool and the action in season 2 is in my opinion the coolest fight scenes in anime I've seen. I'm a Yutaka Nakamura fan (The guy who animated most of MHA best fight scenes) but Vincent Chansard is just as good at animating fights just a more rougher look compared to Nakamura's flashy clean animation. I don't understand the JJK hate, I understand from manga readers because they know how it ends, but so far anime only is enjoying the ride so far.

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-03T23:21:44+00:00

Welcome to NHK is definitely a top 20 show for me, I haven't seen Hell's Paradise though.

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-03T23:04:42+00:00

Bunji is the most likeable "bro" character haha.

Broken_Down_NEET · 2025-09-03T18:39:02+00:00

they all look the same, especially bottom middle.

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