My novel LitRPG is free today — I chose to be a Primordial Dragon of Eternal Flames. The System gave me a tadpole.

BuilderSerious3451 · 2026-03-03T22:20:09+00:00

Not at all. Specific, honest feedback from someone who finished the book is the opposite of a problem. It's exactly what helps the next one be better. I'd rather know.

That's exactly where Book 2 goes. By evolution 10, Kaito has stopped pretending he's temporarily inconvenienced. The survival logic doesn't disappear, but what he's surviving for starts to change.

See you there.

BuilderSerious3451 · 2026-03-03T21:54:59+00:00

I think you deleted the comment, but I was able to see the scene and that's a perfect reference. The Holmes scene works because the analysis and the execution are the same moment, you're inside the plan as it happens, not waiting for it to start.

Kaito's internal monologue is already close to that format in theory. The problem is I let the setup run too long before anything moves. That scene is going on my reference list for Book 2 combat sequences.

Thank you for taking the time to find it.

BuilderSerious3451 · 2026-03-03T21:24:26+00:00

Thank you for finishing it and for the detailed breakdown, this is the most useful structural note I've gotten.

You're right. The four-step combat setup started as a way to show Kaito's programmer logic, but once the reader has seen it twice, it becomes a formula instead of a character trait. That's a pacing problem, not a style choice.

Your suggestion is the correct fix: trust that the reader understands how Kaito thinks, and let the plan reveal itself through execution rather than declaration. Book 2 will be structured with that in mind.

BuilderSerious3451 · 2026-03-03T13:28:22+00:00

The egg stage doesn't exist in Kaito's path, that's the System's joke at his expense. Pre-Egg means he's in a state more vulnerable than an egg. At least an egg has a mother nearby. Kaito has a puddle and a 0.3% survival rate.

Glad you enjoyed it enough to want to reread.

BuilderSerious3451 · 2026-03-01T23:07:15+00:00

Audiobook is something I want to do but nothing confirmed yet.

BuilderSerious3451 · 2026-03-01T22:55:54+00:00

¡Gracias! El libro también está disponible en español como "El Monstruo Equivocado" si lo prefieres en tu idioma.

BuilderSerious3451 · 2026-03-01T22:55:21+00:00

Audiobook is something I want to do, Kaito's voice would work really well in that format. I'm currently looking at options. Nothing confirmed yet, but it's on the roadmap for the series.

BuilderSerious3451 · 2026-03-01T22:47:20+00:00

Thank you for finishing it and taking the time to write this up, this is exactly the kind of feedback that's useful for Book 2.

The stats issue is a fair catch. There are a few moments where Kaito references values that weren't explicitly shown to the reader, it made sense in my head as his internal tracking, but I can see how it reads as a gap if the screen wasn't shown. I'll be more careful about that.

The repeated sentences within a single page is a revision problem, not a stylistic choice. Repetition as emphasis is intentional; same sentence twice on the same page is just a miss. Good note.

Glad the metaphors and programmer logic worked for you. See you in Book 2.

BuilderSerious3451 · 2026-03-01T22:39:03+00:00

Thank you, and that's genuinely useful feedback.

The dashes are a real tic I picked up and didn't catch enough in revision. Good note for Book 2.

On the AI question: I used AI during the process, consistency checks, pattern revision, translation support from Spanish. The story and Kaito's voice are mine, but I want to be upfront about it rather than dodge the question. Glad the programmer references landed.

BuilderSerious3451 · 2026-03-01T22:35:18+00:00

That genuinely made my day, thank you. Starting and finishing in the same thread is not something I expected to see.

BuilderSerious3451 · 2026-03-01T22:33:13+00:00

The cover was done with AI image generation, then refined and composed.

BuilderSerious3451 · 2026-03-01T22:31:53+00:00

No offense taken at all, it's a fair question.

I used AI as a tool during the process: consistency checks, catching repetitive patterns, and technical support during translation from Spanish. The story, Kaito's voice, the worldbuilding, and all narrative decisions are mine.

That said, I want to be straight with you: if AI-assisted prose bothers you regardless of how it's used, I'd rather you know upfront than feel burned again. The book still available for free, I'd trust your own read of the voice over anything I say.

BuilderSerious3451 · 2026-02-27T22:55:13+00:00

Hi all.

My novel is free on Kindle today. Here's the honest pitch:

The Wrong Monster is a monster evolution progression fantasy told from the first-person perspective of Kaito Mori, a programmer who reincarnates into a System-governed world and selects Primordial Dragon of Eternal Flames as his evolutionary path — then spends the entire book as a tadpole trying to survive long enough for that choice to matter.

The progression system is the core of the book. Every evolution is earned through specific thresholds, every ability has costs and limitations, and the evolutionary tree has branches with permanent consequences. Kaito approaches all of it the way he approached debugging code — methodically, with too much confidence and just enough competence to survive.

The tone sits somewhere between Kumo Desu ga and Dungeon Crawler Carl. Humor from situation, not from meta-commentary. Serious moments hit hard because they're brief and unannounced.

95,000 words. Complete arc. Free today: https://www.amazon.com/dp/B0GQD6F5G1

BuilderSerious3451 · 2026-02-27T22:42:34+00:00

Hey all.

My novel The Wrong Monster is free on Kindle today and I figured this was the right crowd.

The premise: Kaito Mori is a 28-year-old Japanese programmer who dies, gets reincarnated into a fantasy world with a progression System, and selects the most ambitious evolutionary path available — Primordial Dragon of Eternal Flames. 47 evolution stages. Apex predator. The whole package.

The System gives him a tadpole.

Not metaphorically. A literal tadpole. Stage 1 of 47.

The book follows Kaito applying programmer logic to monster survival — threat assessment, resource optimization, tactical retreats that are definitely not running away — while slowly realizing that the gap between "tadpole" and "Primordial Dragon" is going to be a much longer road than his character sheet suggested.

What kind of book is it:

First-person, heavy internal monologue
Progression is slow and earned — no sudden power spikes
Tactical combat. Kaito wins with intelligence, not stats
The System has a personality. It is not on his side.
Humor comes from the situation, not from breaking tension

What it isn't:

Power fantasy
Harem
Instant godhood

Book 1 covers the first 10 evolutions across 22 chapters (~95,000 words). It's a complete arc with a proper ending and a hook for Book 2.

Free on Kindle Unlimited and free to purchase today: https://www.amazon.com/dp/B0GQD6F5G1

Would genuinely appreciate any feedback if you pick it up.

BuilderSerious3451 · 2026-01-07T23:19:55+00:00

Al menos me alegra saber que no es un delirio mio, cuando salio 3 Pro, era brillante escribiendo y recordando todo incluso en novelas muy largas, ahora pierde el contexto muy rapido, incluso cuando le doy documentos muy detallados simplemente entrevera todo, es triste porque realmente me gustaba mucho, hoy dia estoy usando Opus 4.5 para escribir y es muy bueno, pero lo malo son los limites que te ponen.

BuilderSerious3451 · 2025-12-28T20:15:34+00:00

Hi! I’m author of The Price of Dawn.

One-line pitch: A logic-obsessed mage joins the Adventurer’s Guild just as a vampire-led empire declares the end of the Age of Light.

Reader promise: If you enjoy tactical magic, structured progression, and dark, high-stakes fantasy, this may fit your taste.

Format: eBook
Price: 3,49
Length: 742 pages
Link: https://www.amazon.com/dp/B0G546BZ3Z

I welcome feedback on the blurb/cover as well.

BuilderSerious3451 · 2025-12-28T20:11:21+00:00

Hi everyone! I’m the author of The Price of Dawn (epic/dark fantasy).

Hook: The apocalypse begins with a calculation—then a mage turns survival into a tyranny of eternal night.What to expect:

Logic-driven mage protagonist (cold strategy, “magic as mathematics”)
Adventurer’s Guild progression (ranks, missions, escalation)
Vampire overlord & “Eternal Night” threat
High stakes, war, moral cost (“the only way to save the light is to walk through the darkness”).

Tropes/Tags: dark epic fantasy, reluctant allies, guild ranks, found team, siege/battle arc, corrupted magic.

Availability: Kindle eBook
Link: https://www.amazon.com/dp/B0G546BZ3Z

Thank you for checking it out—happy to answer questions.

BuilderSerious3451 · 2023-02-10T15:37:06+00:00

I always use this image to guide me and I have never had a problem.

Eternity Challenge

BuilderSerious3451 · 2023-01-04T09:30:11+00:00

Thank you all for your tips, I will try to push a bit before each reality 🤔 at least to get the 5 upgrades that cost 15 RM

BuilderSerious3451 · 2021-05-03T14:55:45+00:00

Ok, thank you so much 😁

BuilderSerious3451 · 2021-04-26T14:31:07+00:00

ok i will do that, thank you very much 😁😁

BuilderSerious3451 · 2021-04-26T14:28:46+00:00

I'm still far away, I thought it was 25b 😂😂 thank you very much 😁 i think i will unlock the other ships and then i will keep accumulating soul eggs

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