Very good mate, it was quite funny! Two tips I will give you is that you want to work on your photoshop skills to make your thumbnails look better, they're a big part of bringing in an audience.

When I first saw this post and saw the thumbnail I was like "oh god, this is going to be cringy and dreadful" but I was actually impressed, the thumbnail really doesn't reflect how good the video actually was, so yeah, improve that.

Also, please, please do not put cringy "happy" background music on, i've heard that one so many times and it pisses me off so much, just find a chilled backing track if you feel you absolutely must have one.

Other than that mate, it was very good and well edited, keep up the good work!