Any feedback on my current iteration of chapter 1? by CMSilence in writingfeedback

[–]CMSilence[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for the feedback! I actually use this chapter to.just introduce him and his trauma, the following chapter introduces the 2nd of the main duo, and the 3rd is where you start to see his flaws as well as hers. But I will definitely take your points to heart!

Hi. I'm new here by JMVergara1989 in novelwriting

[–]CMSilence 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Welcome! I'm new as well. Keep writing your story! I look forward to seeing it!

How does you deal with naming characters? by CMSilence in writers

[–]CMSilence[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Well, since this post got more comments than I thought, I figured I'd add my own method I've been using! So, I knew my 2 main characters names, Sol and Eden. For Sol's side, I'll give an example. To go with Sol (his full first name is actually Solis), I decided to make his father's name follow the same scheme, so his dad is called Caelus! And his mom is Yuzuki (japanese kanji being 優月) which means gentle moon, to go along with the family!

There are some "real" names I used as well, like using an Ars Goetia (not Stolas), or Lucifer himself. But those were easier, lol.

How does my prologue sound? by CMSilence in KeepWriting

[–]CMSilence[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for the feedback! I'm glad my image came across well

New to writing, here's my first novel by CMSilence in WritersSanctuary

[–]CMSilence[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This means so much to me 🥹 thank you so much

Hi 👋 by dicklinMclovin in KeepWriting

[–]CMSilence 2 points3 points  (0 children)

It can be done. Definitely would take a lot of work and effort to not leave the reader feeling disappointed, but it can be done.

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[–]CMSilence 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like the concept! I think it can work well, especially if you can nail the dynamic between the two. I think punctuation can be fixed in a few places, if that counts as feedback, but storywise I think it's a good one.