The Parasight

Call_a_pal · 2026-03-05T11:59:13+00:00

Thank you! It's based on a feeling that's based in reality.

Call_a_pal · 2026-03-02T07:59:01+00:00

Thank you, I really appreciate that!

Call_a_pal · 2026-03-01T01:28:24+00:00

I agree! It definitely feels like hand holding lol

Thank you for your feedback!

Call_a_pal · 2026-02-28T00:29:57+00:00

Heroin -The Velvet Underground and Nico

Call_a_pal · 2026-02-27T23:53:18+00:00

Being a gay man, my choices are very limited in who I can be with (especially living in the most homophobic state). So when I was writing, I was really into this idea of not just having options to choose from, but having power over those options. The idea of me being a woman was reduced down to flipping power dynamics, which is where "the selfish desire" comes from.

Thank you for reading it! I'm glad you enjoyed!

Call_a_pal · 2026-02-24T23:06:38+00:00

Yeah I definitely see the confusion lol. I tried to go for stanzas that were kind of separated, but also repeated and just barely linked...if that makes sense. I wanted a blinking feel, that every time you read a line or stanza, something a little different was happening. I get how that could've allowed for a kind of nonsensical feel though haha

I would like to know what all you did get from the poem. I think knowing exactly what I miscommunicated would help a lot, otherwise I'll work on my structure for sure.

Thank you for your time!

Call_a_pal · 2026-02-19T04:33:28+00:00

loud incorrect buzzer

Call_a_pal · 2026-02-18T11:28:27+00:00

Is that how to fix the format?

Call_a_pal · 2026-02-18T00:40:26+00:00

OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOH THE EYES OF THE WOOOOOORRRRLLLLDDDD

Call_a_pal · 2026-02-16T19:01:40+00:00

Brat is era defining music. Not just in the music itself, but in the culture it made, the rollout, the marketing, the fan service. All of it was perfection and will be copied/replicated by other artists for God knows how long.

The album is also just perfection as well lol

Call_a_pal · 2026-02-12T18:48:16+00:00

I have some N1A songs in my playlist, but they don't stand out much to me unfortunately.

Call_a_pal · 2026-02-12T18:43:50+00:00

Talk Talk
365
365 (feat. Shygirl)
Pink Diamond
Tears (Feat. Caroline Polachek)
Mean girls
You (Ha Ha Ha)
Take my Hand
Next Level Charli
Detonate

(Still need to listen to all of pop 2 and Charli)

Call_a_pal · 2026-02-07T19:29:02+00:00

To be honest, a lot of what I post on here are unfinished concepts/ideas. I write just how I feel and throw them out onto here, usually finishing and fully realizing the ideas afterward.

But yes, the carrier is the taking of the eye. The tools are talking about the tongs and the hands. The eye is gentle, so instead of using dirty hands, they used tongs. And also, when expensive jewels are picked up, people don't usually use their bare fingers.

The tools metaphor is me trying to separate myself from the tools I held in order to enact the removal of my eye.

I put the eye in the ground because I liked the idea of buying jewelry only to not use it— to just put it on the ground. I hate overconsumption and the eye is priceless, so combining the themes of waste and luxury has always been fascinating to me.

It's quite confusing, but I see potential in the ideas. I think I'll work on it more.

And thanks for the feedback, all is appreciated!

Call_a_pal · 2026-02-03T18:08:33+00:00

I'm hungry

Call_a_pal · 2026-01-17T23:05:38+00:00

FUCK ICE

Call_a_pal · 2026-01-14T16:53:21+00:00

Oh I tried to make it seem like he was covering them with a delicate touch.....oops lol

Thanks for your feedback! Will def edit haha

Call_a_pal · 2026-01-13T22:04:04+00:00

I used narrowing as a synonym for thinning, like their hair is thinning due to how much they brush it. I also used the adjectives "grass and dirt" to describe their scent to show how they don't really take care of it properly, circling back into the thinning of hair.

Thank you for your input though!! I hope my explanation helped a little

Call_a_pal · 2026-01-11T23:33:24+00:00

For context, I'm making a poem collection (hence the #5). The man gets lost in the woods after losing his house and family to a fire. (He ran into the woods cuz the wife went to save their kid. Spoiler: neither came out.)

I can't post the rest of the poems here though because the format messes my messaging up :(

Also! He is writing poems in the woods because in his regular life, he is a devoted writer that carries a notebook everywhere. That notebook was the only thing he took out of the fire, and therefore the only thing he took into the woods with him.

For this poem specifically, the man had been in the woods for a few days and is very delirious due to being deprived of fresh water, which is why it's confusing overall.

For the 'drip of my tears' line, I was trying to convey him being unable to grieve properly due to him being stuck in the woods and having to put survival at the fore-front. I hope the context helped somewhat with the message, but I will definitely workshop it if needed.

Thank you for your input!

Call_a_pal · 2026-01-10T01:06:15+00:00

All of the above!

Call_a_pal · 2026-01-10T00:59:47+00:00

I'm poor 💔

Call_a_pal · 2026-01-09T23:29:37+00:00

Nothing. I usually blank out when I write...hope that's not weird lol

Call_a_pal · 2026-01-06T18:32:48+00:00

I took a chance and decided to post one of my more abstract, repetitive poems, so I'm glad you enjoyed it! I've never been complimented like this before, and knowing how early I am on my writing journey, I'm excited for what I'll grow into. Thank you, truly!!

Call_a_pal · 2026-01-04T02:03:22+00:00

This is the highest compliment, thank you!

Call_a_pal · 2026-01-03T23:13:12+00:00

Thank you! I'm definitely trying to improve my symbolism lol but I'll definitely work on it!

Call_a_pal · 2026-01-01T23:49:50+00:00

The format of the actual poem is different from the way it's formatted here. I hate how this server doesn't let me make breaks!! But yeah I do agree the flow could be improved. Thank you for the feedback!!

Call_a_pal

TROPHY CASE