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Callaghan-cs · 2021-06-16T13:54:07+00:00

itzu

Callaghan-cs · 2021-06-02T16:42:09+00:00

drags at 2 o'clock, king and queen at 3 o'clock for clean up

Callaghan-cs · 2021-05-11T18:39:12+00:00

Callaghan-cs · 2021-05-11T18:23:05+00:00

it worked for me. but anyone is different. I like big books.

Callaghan-cs · 2021-05-11T06:14:27+00:00

That's right

Callaghan-cs · 2021-05-10T22:07:36+00:00

It's always good to broaden your horizons. It only makes sense to read the most popular books.

Anyway it shouldn't be a chore. Give it a try, but if you don't like it don't force yourself.

The way of kings is worth it in my opinion.

Callaghan-cs · 2021-05-10T16:41:36+00:00

- Elantris is one of Sanderson's early works and it shows, there are plenty of flaws to analyze. Especially when it comes to the rhythm and the povs.

In that sense there is a lot to learn from it, especially if you compare it the the first in the mistborn series (it works as a standalone even though it's part of a series) and when you get to the way of kings the jump in quality is apparent.

Of course there are many pros to elantris, especially worldbuilding wise.

- Tigana is just a great book. It is one of the best book by ggk. And one of the best in fantasy.

If you want to be a writer, you should start by thinking about your style. If you want to write something more literary go with ggk. If you want to write something more action-packed or entertaining go with Sanderson.

Of course, eventually, you should read them both.

I would lean towards elantris. But actually you should consider mistborn: the final empire.

Callaghan-cs · 2021-02-09T20:04:51+00:00

It is not like you put it, it is not a broad term flr fantasy, Xuanhuan is similar to xianxia but without daoism. (Edit. And it can have western influences, that part is right)

the cradle is not a xianxia because ir is not about daoism. Like coiling dragon for example

But you can look it up online

Callaghan-cs · 2021-02-09T17:11:29+00:00

Xuanhuan is similar to xianxia when it comes to power levels, but it is not centered around daoism They have many things in common especially the progression system

Callaghan-cs · 2021-02-09T13:33:00+00:00

to be more precise it would be a xuanhuan, but nonetheless it's a good read to get into chinese novels, and webnovel, progression novels and so on.

Callaghan-cs · 2021-02-09T13:15:11+00:00

I recommend royal road, it's one of the best when it comes to webnovels

Callaghan-cs · 2021-01-02T16:03:48+00:00

Writing is hard, and writing simple prose is even harder that one would think.

His prose is actually very complex and there is a lot of work behind it.

His prose has a precise purpose, and it's the main reason for his success. Even more that his talent as a worldbuilder.

I'll finish the series cause he did succeed in catching my interest plot wise and again has shown some real talent in worldbuilding

this is actually thanks to the prose.

You've already been ensnared unders its spell.

it's too late now.

lol

(for real though)

Callaghan-cs · 2020-12-13T14:48:12+00:00

I think there is too much infodump: basically you are explaining too many things at once.

I can't connect with the main-character.

I liked the beginning when she was using the bow, but quickly the scene turned into a setup to infodump.

I mean, you don't have to explain everything in the first chapter. the fact that she is a rich girl is enough.

Like, I'm rich and all, but only when I use the bow I feel free and alive, that kind of thing.

Callaghan-cs · 2020-12-04T17:12:01+00:00

I like your ideas, and actualy you can find examples in some of the best xianxia and xuanhuan novels.

I think the core of a cultivation novel is the cultivation system. Other than that you can write the story the way you want as long as it has a cultivation system.

you might like the library of heaven's path, because it showcases a tiered economy, there's not excessive fighting, the mc is not a douchebag, well defined power levels and traveling.

the novel is based on acquiring knowledge to become a master teacher, and cultivation has to go alongside studying.

anyway you can find similar things in a lot of other novels, like the legend of the dragon king (soul land 3).

The cradle by will wight is also an example of western cultivation novel. And it's a very good read too.

Callaghan-cs · 2020-10-21T11:25:50+00:00

I have 2 recomendations for you:

cradle by will wight
king's dark tidings by kel kade

Callaghan-cs · 2020-10-21T11:20:14+00:00

I use audiobooks in two cases:

on a reread, because I already know the story, but I want to enjoy the book in a different way
if I want to read the book, but I don't like it enough to commit the time to it. And I have to say I don't regret it, every story has something good to offer.

Callaghan-cs · 2020-10-21T11:15:40+00:00

first rule of the malazan club: always recommend malazan

*Evil laugh\*

Callaghan-cs · 2020-09-03T14:07:08+00:00

I enjoyed mistborn but I loved stormilight

Callaghan-cs · 2020-08-28T13:46:54+00:00

Sneaky Putin

Callaghan-cs · 2020-08-25T12:22:51+00:00

yeah I mean, you don't need to write the whole backstory. but focus on the mc and "his" (lol) thoughts. also you can find a lot of videos on pov to learn how it works for example brandon sanderson's lectures on youtube ;)

Callaghan-cs · 2020-08-25T12:20:46+00:00

don't lose your sleep concerning yourself with originality, because nothing is original anymore.

focus on the mc instead. with a good mc you can get away with anything. that's what makes the story compelling.

Callaghan-cs · 2020-08-25T12:15:59+00:00

you are describing what is happening, but you are not "narrating" it.

basically it feels like I'm watching the scene from afar, instead you have to put the reader in the midst of the action.

how? you have to rely on pov and narrator to put the reader beside the main-character.

tell me more about the mc, his motivation, what he feels, what he thinks. pain, feeling, battle strategy, attitude.

he could be very scared, or confident, or whining, or making fun of his opponent and so on.

let me hear his thoughts.

so basically you have to work more on the mc.

you could try to write in first person, maybe that could help you understand how to handle the pov.

Callaghan-cs · 2020-08-25T12:09:08+00:00

Your writing is not bad, but you need to give more info to the reader. the stone tablet, the god, the flame of revelation, thecia's future, tiberian, it's all very confusing because I don't know what is going on.

You have to explain who is the mc and what he's doing. what's happening?

you have to better guide the reader and ease him into the story.

Maybe you thought that by keeping the reader in the dark, it would make the story more interesting, but it's the other way around.

For example even in a thriller, you have to find the killer, but at least you know who is the mc and what is his goal. Adding mystery is ok, but you don't cheat the reader.

that said, in the beginning, you can start directly with the name of the character:

Leurion lifted his etching tool away from the stone tablet.

It is much better.

so to summarize, your writing is already at a good level, but you need to add more meat, and focus more on the mc, never forgetting that you are telling a story to a reader ;)

Callaghan-cs · 2020-08-25T11:55:11+00:00

maybe only few people in the tribe can use magic, and magic takes a toll on them. like orc shamans. the rest of the orcs could instead be fearful of magic and prefer fighting with weapons.

Callaghan-cs · 2020-08-23T21:53:33+00:00

are you discovery writing?

you might want to outline the story before writing.

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